（古詩英譯）秋夕 – 白居易

秋夕 – 白居易

 

葉聲落如雨，月色白似霜。

夜深方獨臥，誰為拂塵床。

 

The leaves falling sound like the falling rain,

The moonlight looks like the pure frost so white.

I wonder who’d clear the dust for my bed,

When I retire alone in the still night.  

 

V2.

The falling leaves sound like the rain that’s shed

The moonlight looks like the pure frost so white.

I wonder who’d clear the dust for my bed,

When I retire alone in the still night.  

 

Tr. Ziyuzile

12/09/2024

 

基於這首絕句的首句不入韻，二四行押 陽 韻，為此英譯首版的韻腳嚐試處理為 ABCB 來對應原文的原韻。第二版改韻式為常見於英詩的 ABAB 韻式。 相比之下，個人還是喜歡初版，特別是第一句顯得較為自然更富詩意。