英詩漢譯 I Think I Should Have Loved You Presently by Edna St. Vince

對我， 這是一首比較難翻譯的詩。 我不敢說我翻譯得對。  歡迎討論。

I Think I Should Have Loved You Presently by Edna St. Vincent Millay   I think I should have loved you presently, And given in earnest words I flung in jest; And lifted honest eyes for you to see, And caught your hand against my cheek and breast; And all my pretty follies flung aside That won you to me, and beneath your gaze, Naked of reticence and shorn of pride, Spread like a chart my little wicked ways. I, that had been to you, had you remained, But one more waking from a recurrent dream, Cherish no less the certain stakes I gained, And walk your memory’s halls, austere, supreme, A ghost in marble of a girl you knew Who would have loved you in a day or two.

我想我沒準兒很快愛上你by Edna St. Vincent Millay 翻譯： 高興   我想我沒準兒很快愛上你, 對你誠懇地講話而不是躲閃回避； 並且抬起誠實的雙眼給你看， 讓你用手在我的臉頰和胸前遊弋； 並且把所有的嬌柔矯揉造作一並收起 即使它們曾為我贏得了你， 並任你上下凝睇， 去掉保留，撇掉自尊， 平攤開來， 讓我嬌嗔的樣子一覽無餘。 如果我早就這樣做， 我們不會分離， 但我再次被從類似的夢中喚起， 過去那些教訓絕對不能忘記， 這樣， 我從你記憶的殿堂走出， 冷靜， 高傲地， 如大理石雕像的幽靈， 那個你似乎了解的女孩， 她沒準兒一兩天後會愛上你。

 這是一首講愛情的詩。  即使在英語世界， 人們在分析作者的本意時， 也有兩種猜測。 一種是男人拋棄女人， 另一種是女人拋棄男人。  後一種見解是少數， 我隻見過一篇文章。見： http://www.pipsqueakery.net/poetry-thursday-edna-st-vincent-millay-and-the-sassy-love-sonnet/  但我的分析與此文章相近， 因此按這一思路作的翻譯。 我把這一翻譯放在這裏以期引起討論。