hammerheadshark:
A man knows a wine only at tipsy;
A flower becomes a true beauty only at half-blooming.
My revised version:
A man knows a good wine only when he is at tipsy.
A flower reaches its prime only when blooming halfway.
(Even number of syllable and rhyme)
My new version
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Sorry, 應該是syllables
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07/21/2013 postreply
07:43:27
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Yes, polish it.
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07/21/2013 postreply
07:57:16
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有點那個...
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07/21/2013 postreply
09:19:01
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Hope this will clarify
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07/21/2013 postreply
09:32:17
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And it will improve your version if you change "a man" into "one
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07/21/2013 postreply
10:18:15
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Some words got cut off. So here is the complete comment:
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07/21/2013 postreply
10:21:30
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I really don't see the difference.
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07/21/2013 postreply
10:28:55
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Yes, it would be a big improvement!
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07/21/2013 postreply
10:43:52
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I thought you'd go there
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07/21/2013 postreply
13:31:36
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No, it doesn't.
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07/21/2013 postreply
10:23:39
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As I said
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07/21/2013 postreply
10:33:53
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But you didn't answer my questions. Replicated below:
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07/21/2013 postreply
10:46:14
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Ok,
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07/21/2013 postreply
13:24:51