Some words got cut off. So here is the complete comment:

來源: 聚曦亭 於 2013-07-21 10:21:30 [] [舊帖] [給我悄悄話] 閱讀數 : (198 bytes)
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And it will improve your version if you change "a man" into "one." "A man" comes from the subconscious conversion from Chinese to English.

 

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• I really don't see the difference. -hammerheadshark- ♀ 給 hammerheadshark 發送悄悄話 (220 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:28:55

• Yes, it would be a big improvement! -聚曦亭- ♀ 給 聚曦亭 發送悄悄話 (711 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:43:52

• I thought you'd go there -hammerheadshark- ♀ 給 hammerheadshark 發送悄悄話 (245 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 13:31:36

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