格譯：Last night's stars, last night's winds, 黃譯：For the stars, for the wind, last night we met 許譯：As last night twinkle stars, as last night blows the breeze
格譯：By the West wall of the painted house,East of the hall of cassia. 黃譯：East of cassia hall, west of bower of art. 許譯：West of the painted bower,east of Cassia Hall.
格譯的“By”加得好，有空間感。筋鬥雲兄說：“這一句有一點，三文均未表現出來：原文第一二句有空間的對應關係。第一句先遠目的星辰，後近感覺的風；第二句畫樓也是遠景，外觀特色。”我以為有點穿鑿。畫樓，桂堂當是作者很熟悉的地方，未必有這些遠近的講究。格譯加了“wall”是高明處，“West wall of the painted house，”較具體，比West of the painted house好。
身無彩鳳雙飛翼，
格譯：For bodies no fluttering side by side of splendid phoenix wings, 黃譯：We have no wings to fly side by side. Yet 許譯：Having no wings, I can’t fly to you as I please;
心有靈犀一點通。
格譯：For hearts the one minute thread from root to tip of the magic horn. 黃譯：One sharp arrow wounded yours and my heart. 許譯：Our hearts at one, your ears can hear my inner call.
格譯：At separate tables, played hook-in-the-palm. The wine of spring warmed.Teamed as rivals, guessed what the cup hid. The candle flame reddened. 黃譯：Warmer than spring wine, you hint how to bet. Burning like candle fire, I guessed truly smart. 許譯：Maybe you’re playing hook-in-palm and dringking wine. Or guessing what the cup hides under candle red.
黃許譯均不堪讀。格譯中間兩聯均保持了文字的對仗美。見其英文功力，非黃許可比。
嗟餘聽鼓應官去， 走馬蘭台類轉蓬。
格譯：Alas, I hear the drum, must go where office summons, Ride my horse to the Orchid Terrace, the wind-uprooted weed my likeness. 黃譯：Alas, called morning drums. Stumbling on street, To duty at Royal Library, was this torn sheet. 許譯：Alas! I hear the drum call me to duties mine, Like rootless weed to Orchid Hall I ride ahead.
格譯的長句其實讀來很有韻味，通篇也整齊。黃許的短句很急促，士大夫的風度失盡。格譯非但忠實於原著，而且表達得幹淨。聽鼓應官去，（I hear the drum, must go where office summons），類轉蓬（the wind-uprooted weed my likeness.）英文的精練妥貼。水平黃許遠不可及。
格譯：Last night's stars, last night's winds, 黃譯：For the stars, for the wind, last night we met 許譯：As last night twinkle stars, as last night blows the breeze
格譯：By the West wall of the painted house,East of the hall of cassia. 黃譯：East of cassia hall, west of bower of art. 許譯：West of the painted bower,east of Cassia Hall.
格譯的“By”加得好，有空間感。筋鬥雲兄說：“這一句有一點，三文均未表現出來：原文第一二句有空間的對應關係。第一句先遠目的星辰，後近感覺的風；第二句畫樓也是遠景，外觀特色。”我以為有點穿鑿。畫樓，桂堂當是作者很熟悉的地方，未必有這些遠近的講究。格譯加了“wall”是高明處，“West wall of the painted house，”較具體，比West of the painted house好。
身無彩鳳雙飛翼，
格譯：For bodies no fluttering side by side of splendid phoenix wings, 黃譯：We have no wings to fly side by side. Yet 許譯：Having no wings, I can’t fly to you as I please;
心有靈犀一點通。
格譯：For hearts the one minute thread from root to tip of the magic horn. 黃譯：One sharp arrow wounded yours and my heart. 許譯：Our hearts at one, your ears can hear my inner call.
格譯：At separate tables, played hook-in-the-palm. The wine of spring warmed.Teamed as rivals, guessed what the cup hid. The candle flame reddened. 黃譯：Warmer than spring wine, you hint how to bet. Burning like candle fire, I guessed truly smart. 許譯：Maybe you’re playing hook-in-palm and dringking wine. Or guessing what the cup hides under candle red.
黃許譯均不堪讀。格譯中間兩聯均保持了文字的對仗美。見其英文功力，非黃許可比。
嗟餘聽鼓應官去， 走馬蘭台類轉蓬。
格譯：Alas, I hear the drum, must go where office summons, Ride my horse to the Orchid Terrace, the wind-uprooted weed my likeness. 黃譯：Alas, called morning drums. Stumbling on street, To duty at Royal Library, was this torn sheet. 許譯：Alas! I hear the drum call me to duties mine, Like rootless weed to Orchid Hall I ride ahead.
格譯的長句其實讀來很有韻味，通篇也整齊。黃許的短句很急促，士大夫的風度失盡。格譯非但忠實於原著，而且表達得幹淨。聽鼓應官去，（I hear the drum, must go where office summons），類轉蓬（the wind-uprooted weed my likeness.）英文的精練妥貼。水平黃許遠不可及。
