英譯問賢嗎? 英譯小學生先來拋磚引玉, 歡迎各位高手評論與指正.

問彩雲，何處飛
願乘風永追隨
有奇緣，能相聚
死亦無悔
Which way are you flying towards
My iridescent cloud,
Wish that I could follow you always
By riding wind beneath
If such a marvelous destiny could bring us together
Even departing from this life would be no regret

我柔情深似海
你癡心可問天
誓相守，長繾綣
歲歲年年
My tender love is as deep as the ocean
And the heaven knows your infatuation
Take an oath to hold on together
And our intimacy shall be eternal

我怎能離開你
我怎能將你棄
你常在我心底
信我莫疑
How could I desist from you
How would I relinguish you
You’re deeply inside of my heart
Have faith in me without doubt

願兩情常相守
在一處永綢繆
除了你還有誰，和我為偶
Wish two hearts are in love
And tangled together forever
No one else could pair with me
Except you, my only soul mate

藍色花一叢叢
名叫做勿忘儂 ……
Those clumps of blue flowers
They're so-called forget me nots ……

所有跟帖： 

• A little typo: relinguish -> relinquish :) -南山鬆- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/24/2015 postreply 08:51:26

• 謝謝你的細心指正! 還好 relinguish 這個詞並不存在, 否則譯意可能會同原文出入很大,嗬嗬 -美的覺醒- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/24/2015 postreply 09:27:12

• 厲害阿，原來南山鬆是深藏不露：）謝謝！ -虔謙- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/24/2015 postreply 14:43:58

• 不是深藏不露,水平有限,都不敢譯.因這個字不認識,所以查了一下:) -南山鬆- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/24/2015 postreply 15:13:33

• 你是小學生，那我應該是還在上幼稚園 （你別說，有時候會想人生重新走一遭……） -虔謙- ♀ (471 bytes) () 05/24/2015 postreply 14:42:59

• 虔謙你果然是人如其名, 值得我好好學習! 靜待你的指點, 先謝過! -美的覺醒- ♂ (31 bytes) () 05/24/2015 postreply 19:03:09

• 美的覺醒譯得既神速又詩意，學習了，謝謝分享。 -紫君- ♀ (1114 bytes) () 05/25/2015 postreply 09:59:41

• 紫君, 過獎了, 多謝你的歡迎和鼓勵! I like lots of your posts, such as "On Frien -美的覺醒- ♂ (93 bytes) () 05/25/2015 postreply 15:43:03

• 美的覺醒的翻譯真是神來之筆.歡迎你常來美壇. -~葉子~- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/28/2015 postreply 13:09:32

• 常常能欣賞到葉子你甜美的歌聲, 還有你的中英文朗誦總是那樣感情充沛, 聲線柔美, 吐字清晰 -美的覺醒- ♂ (239 bytes) () 05/29/2015 postreply 11:36:05

• 你的翻譯裏有很強的 Spiritual 內涵，非常有特色和感染力。 -虔謙- ♀ (105 bytes) () 05/31/2015 postreply 12:58:57

• 虔謙,你真有這種感覺嗎? 太受鼓舞了, 謝謝大作家的肯定和指點! -美的覺醒- ♂ (146 bytes) () 06/02/2015 postreply 12:31:10