正文部分是白話文，我敲進來過其中的一段：

摘自《春月》Spring Moon - A Novel of China by Bette Bao Lord, 第三十一章

明玉還沒想出來怎麽繼續剛才的話題，長風已經滿臉含笑地用筷子敲敲酒杯。“朋友們，我們該行個酒令！” 唉，真煩人，明玉暗想。 “好！好！好！”允堅喊道。 “那麽一言為定！” “還是對句好不好？”秉毅建議道，“我來開頭吧？” “我想開頭。讓我開頭行嗎？求求您！”允堅一拍手，打翻了酒杯。 “好，你開頭。”秉毅道。 沉默。 “說吧！”春月說，一麵把瓷杯都移開以防闖禍。“說呀！” 孩子紅著臉，蒙上眼睛，好象自己不看，別人就看不見自己了似的。“我不知道怎麽說。”大家都笑了。全桌隻剩下定誌還沒吃完，允堅轉向他拽他的上衣。“你能給我講講這個酒令怎麽玩嗎？” 定誌從碗邊上抬眼瞥了一眼，不作聲。長風用手帕掩嘴咳嗽。 秉毅頭一個恢複從容之態。“小侄子，我來給你講。你先想一句詩，我們當中的一個人就得對上一句。” “是的，大伯父。不過誰來給我講講這個酒令怎麽玩呢？” 連秉毅也跟著大家一齊笑了。 笑定之後，春月先說：“地的反麵是什麽？” “天。”孩子大聲喊。 “月？” “日。” “走？” “跑。” “夜？” “晝！”定誌叫道，他也明白了。 他抱歉地看一眼孩子。允堅朝他微笑，好象表示不在意他接話，接著問道，“我現在可以開始了嗎？” “小心，”春月提醒說，“我們剛開了個頭，綠樹？” “紅樹。” 春月搖頭。 “為什麽不對，嫂嫂？” “一個字要是綠的反麵，另一個字要和樹屬於一類。” “紅花。” “對了。”春月微笑。“好，黃鸝啼。” 允堅深吸一口氣。“青蛙叫。” “差不多，要說‘青蛙鳴’更好。” 明玉看到定誌又繼續吃飯，好像碗是他可以藏身的屏風似的。他不會這個酒令，明玉想。他有什麽必要會呢？酒令沒什麽要緊，不過掉書袋子的遊戲而已。如果能和他到客廳去談話多好！ 春月的解釋到了尾聲。“第一句，允堅，叫做上聯，對句叫下聯。現在你可以開始了。” 孩子把頭埋在雙臂裏使勁想，大人們等著。他抬頭張嘴，什麽也沒說出來。他皺緊眉頭，把頭又埋進雙臂裏。 隻有定誌喝湯的吸溜聲。 長風開口了。“法國回來的朋友，”他說，“我們何不來給孩子示範一下呢？”他故作無心地笑著。“爾，美姝，何高貴，芳如春泉，博學且善良。” 定誌笑笑，聳一聳肩。 “不必著急，朋友。點心還沒上呢！” 這個莊稼人還是不回答。 這時孩子搭話了，又拽拽定誌的上衣。“他讓你上當，大哥哥！你這下隻好對，‘我，醜男，真低賤，臭似爛泥，愚蠢又惡劣。’他讓你上當！” 定誌不知朝哪裏看才好。 明玉趕緊打破冷場。“不，允堅，這是你對的。我們的新朋友很聰明，才不上這個當呢。” 等笑聲平息後，長風向明玉舉杯。他的笑酸溜溜的。明玉不在意。長風愛怎麽就怎麽，反正攔不住她再見這位佃戶的兒子。 飯吃完後，定誌站起來，十分恭敬地鞠躬。“多謝賞飯，我家祖宗都有光。這是我一生最高興的日子。”

Before Lustrous Jade could think of a way to resume the discussion, August Winds tapped his glass with a chopstick, a grin on his face. "I think, my friends, it is time for a game!" Oh no, she thought. "Yes! Yes! Yes!" cried Enduring Promise. "Settled, then!" "How about a round of antithetical couplets?" suggested Bold Talent. "Shall I start by starting the head?" "I want to be first. Can I be first? Oh, please?" Enduring Promise clapped his hands, upsetting his glass. "Fine, you start," said Bold Talent. Silence. "Well?" said Spring Moon, removing the porcelain cups from danger. "Well?" The boy's face reddened and he covered his eyes, as if not seeing meant being unseen. "I do not know how." Everyone laughed. Enduring Promise turned to Resolute Spirit, who was the only one still eating, and tugged at his shirt. "Can you explain the game to me?" Resolute Spirit peered over the rim of his rice bowl and said nothing. August Winds coughed into his handkerchief. Bold Talent recovered first. "I will explain, my nephew. You start by making up the first line of a poem. Then one of us must match it with an antithesis and a parallel." "Yes, Uncle. But can someone explain the game to me?" Even Bold Talent joined in the laughter. When it had subsided Spring Moon took the lead. "What is the opposite of earth?" "Heaven," the boy shouted. "Moon?" "Sun." "Walk?" "Run." "Night?" "Day!" called out Resolute Spirit, catching on. He looked apologetically at the child. Enduring Promise smiled up at him, as if to say he did not mind, then asked, "May I start now?" "Careful," cautioned Spring Moon. "We have just begun. Green trees?" "Red trees." Spring Moon shook her head. "But why, Sao Sao?" "A word that is opposite of green, and a word that is the same family as tree." "Red flowers." "Correct." Spring Moon smiled. "Now, yellow birds sing." Enduring Promise took a deep breath. "Green frogs talk." "Almost; better if 'green frogs croak.'" Lustrous Jade saw that Resolute Spirit had resumed eating, as if the bowl were a screen behind which he could hide. He does not understand the game, she thought. Why should he? The game was not important, a pastime for book bags. If only they could go into the parlor and talk! Spring Moon was coming to the end of her explanations. "The first line, Enduring Promise, is called the head; the reply, the tail. Now you begin." The boy buried his head in his arms to think. The adults waited. He popped up, opened his mouth. Nothing came. He frowned, then buried his head in his arms again. August Winds spoke up. "My friend from France," he said, "why do we not show the boy how to play the game?" He smiled innocently. "You, beautiful girl, are sublime, fragrant as spring water, learned and good." Resolute Spirit grinned, shrugging his shoulders. "Take your time, my friend. We have not had dessert yet!" Still the peasant did not reply. It was the boy who answered, tugging at his shirt again. "He tricked you, Older Brother! Now you must say, 'I, ugly boy, am ridiculous, smelly as mud, stupid and bad.' He tricked you!" Resolute Spirit did not know where to look. Quickly Lustrous Jade filled in the silence. "No, Enduring Promise, you said it. My new friend is much too smart to be taken in by such a trick." As the laughter faded, August Winds lifted his glass to Lustrous Jade. His smile was bitter. She did not care. Nothing he could do would stop her from seeing more of the farmer's son. When the meal was over, Resolute Spirit stood and bowed most respectfully. "My ancestors and I thank you for this honor. Tonight is the happiest day of my life."

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• 謝謝二號。我看了一下，譯得不錯，雞蛋裏挑骨頭，給出兩條意見。 -聚曦亭- ♀ (3728 bytes) () 01/03/2013 postreply 19:55:49

• 我是先讀的譯著，可能先入為主了，總覺得原版有“翻譯”得不盡人意之處。：-） -北京二號- ♀ (0 bytes) () 01/03/2013 postreply 20:32:02

• 不過，那個Prologue譯得不錯。 -聚曦亭- ♀ (0 bytes) () 01/03/2013 postreply 21:25:00

• 別扭 -bmdn- ♀ (950 bytes) () 01/04/2013 postreply 07:46:35

• 包柏漪的中文底子應該也不薄， -北京二號- ♀ (496 bytes) () 01/04/2013 postreply 10:51:58

• 翻譯的第一原則應該是忠實原著 -bmdn- ♀ (83 bytes) () 01/04/2013 postreply 11:34:40