can you hear the words unspoken
from the eyes,and my soul garden?
the sea of tears surges unconfined
the river of dreams meanders in my mind
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回複:這是試著改了第一段,加上了rhyme,其實,不完全是起初想表達的。
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05/04/2010 postreply
17:11:40
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對,韻是這些詩體的一個要求。否則,就不能叫做14行詩了
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05/04/2010 postreply
20:46:02
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oh, this is a misplacement. meant to follow with the one below.
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05/04/2010 postreply
20:52:25
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sweetie you are as fast as light
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05/04/2010 postreply
21:00:11
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謝謝bear。你真的是博學,一點不錯。learned.
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05/04/2010 postreply
21:06:49
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sweetie,你的詩寫的真是很流暢。
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05/04/2010 postreply
21:24:02
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別抒情了;)。 我這周有deadline要meet。晚安。
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05/04/2010 postreply
21:33:41
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Ok sweetie. I also have so much to do. Work is too much.
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05/04/2010 postreply
21:47:35
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hmm。
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05/05/2010 postreply
20:07:19
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剛要合上書本,your line make me忽然想起來你那個"閃電門拴"了:)
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05/04/2010 postreply
21:30:16
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haha sweetie, how do you remember everything?
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05/04/2010 postreply
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