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回複:這是試著改了第一段,加上了rhyme,其實,不完全是起初想表達的。
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• 對,韻是這些詩體的一個要求。否則,就不能叫做14行詩了 -戲雨飛鷹- ♀ (515 bytes) () 05/04/2010 postreply 20:46:02
• oh, this is a misplacement. meant to follow with the one below. -戲雨飛鷹- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/04/2010 postreply 20:52:25
• sweetie you are as fast as light -hahaman- ♀ (269 bytes) () 05/04/2010 postreply 21:00:11
• 謝謝bear。你真的是博學,一點不錯。learned. -戲雨飛鷹- ♀ (107 bytes) () 05/04/2010 postreply 21:06:49
• sweetie,你的詩寫的真是很流暢。 -hahaman- ♀ (395 bytes) () 05/04/2010 postreply 21:24:02
• 別抒情了;)。 我這周有deadline要meet。晚安。 -戲雨飛鷹- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/04/2010 postreply 21:33:41
• Ok sweetie. I also have so much to do. Work is too much. -hahaman- ♀ (139 bytes) () 05/04/2010 postreply 21:47:35
• hmm。 -戲雨飛鷹- ♀ (50 bytes) () 05/05/2010 postreply 20:07:19
• 剛要合上書本,your line make me忽然想起來你那個"閃電門拴"了:) -戲雨飛鷹- ♀ (105 bytes) () 05/04/2010 postreply 21:30:16
• haha sweetie, how do you remember everything? -hahaman- ♀ (41 bytes) () 05/04/2010 postreply 21:41:39