sonnet 生命之歌

as Fall's fragrant freshness fades from the air
the wafting wind blows the unwilling leaves
whose richness soil now waits for, worn and bare

two trembling magpies hug under the eves
and heavy clouds now herald chilling rain
a farmer hurries home laden with sheaves

in his great courtyard chickens winnow grain
and laughters come from children wild in mirth
so pure their life albeit it looks mundane

the leaves begin to settle to the earth
when chilling rain then melancholy pours
a baby cries -- his wife has given birth

soon winter snow will block the farmer's doors
and making love will be their daily chores

明年此時又一嬰兒在他家哇哇落地
哈

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• 拜讀了，你這是意大利式sonnet嗎？ABA BCB CDC DED EFE GG -李唐- ♂ (26 bytes) () 11/08/2009 postreply 19:00:01

• possibly Italian, I think it is called a terza rima sonnet -monkeyfist- ♂ (215 bytes) () 11/08/2009 postreply 19:48:44

• maybe the first line can be rewritten like -monkeyfist- ♂ (45 bytes) () 11/09/2009 postreply 08:36:11

• in his great courtyard --> inside his courtyard -monkeyfist- ♂ (0 bytes) () 11/09/2009 postreply 09:16:33

• I believe the word NIUBILITY is created just for you! -amazing_grace- ♀ (0 bytes) () 11/09/2009 postreply 00:26:21

• I love the word N -monkeyfist- ♂ (0 bytes) () 11/09/2009 postreply 09:18:21

• ha -monkeyfist- ♂ (0 bytes) () 11/09/2009 postreply 10:48:52

• revision -monkeyfist- ♂ (675 bytes) () 11/09/2009 postreply 10:48:31

• Second time seeing the following words: -amazing_grace- ♀ (261 bytes) () 11/09/2009 postreply 11:53:21

• after you learn all those words you will be a woman of nobility, -monkeyfist- ♂ (110 bytes) () 11/09/2009 postreply 13:06:36

• I'm already of no-(a)bility even before learning these words. -amazing_grace- ♀ (191 bytes) () 11/09/2009 postreply 14:01:43

• 回複：I'm already of no-(a)bility even before learning these words. -monkeyfist- ♂ (1088 bytes) () 11/09/2009 postreply 17:41:22

• Thank you. I appreciate your sincere points and advice. -amazing_grace- ♀ (78 bytes) () 11/09/2009 postreply 19:44:10