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另一石橋的故事

你我多次擦肩而過  

卻始終緣吝一麵
遙望你漸遠的身影
是那樣的多姿,
那樣的迷人
於是
我跪拜蒼天懇求,
讓你回首
那怕讓我變身這石橋忍
受五百年的風吹
終於
你在我化身石橋的瞬間回首,
並贈以一笑
……
空氣在瞬間凝結
……
我欲轉身,奈何已化身石橋
又待閉眼,奈何已化身石橋
隻好,
再次懇求蒼天
我願再忍受五百年的日曬隻求,
你再次回首
立即

another story about another stone bridge

You and I pass each other so many times,But I haven't got the chance to see your face.

evertime when I watch you walk away from me.You look amazing,so I begged the god,all I want is just to see your face no matter it takes,even though I will be turned into a stone bridge and being blown in the wind for 500 years,

I don’t mind.

All of a sudden,You turned your head and gave me a big smile while I am turning into the stone bridge.

Shoot,(forgive me please ,I shouldn’t be this rude,I just can’t help myself)

The time is just like dead,I don’t know what I am thinking ,My brain seems not working at this moment.

I just wanna turn back and run away,but I can’t because I am a stupid stone bride now.

And then I wanna close my eyes, ,but I can’t because I am a stupid stone bride now.

So,I have to beg the god once again,

Please,make the lady turn back to the way she was,I would rather stand being in the sun for 500 more years.

Now.

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the onely thing caught my eyes is "500 years" which -sportwoman- 給 sportwoman 發送悄悄話 sportwoman 的博客首頁 (102 bytes) () 04/17/2012 postreply 21:31:41

謝師妹,一分鍾表揚收到了,也錄下了,反複地聽。也請改下作業。Please. -bingli- 給 bingli 發送悄悄話 bingli 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 04:05:43

我來瞎指點一把。 -非文學青年- 給 非文學青年 發送悄悄話 非文學青年 的博客首頁 (2557 bytes) () 04/17/2012 postreply 22:32:16

文青指點下嘛,覺得怪的地方應怎樣譯?Please!Thanks.真的想進步。 -bingli- 給 bingli 發送悄悄話 bingli 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 03:56:49

How about: -NewVoice- 給 NewVoice 發送悄悄話 NewVoice 的博客首頁 (253 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 04:30:34

"scorch" is a nice choice -hammerheadshark- 給 hammerheadshark 發送悄悄話 (111 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 04:45:09

Nice one! -NewVoice- 給 NewVoice 發送悄悄話 NewVoice 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 04:49:23

也感謝shark的指點,今天心情象過節,這麽多高人指點。 -bingli- 給 bingli 發送悄悄話 bingli 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 15:33:16

非常感謝聲姐的指點。又學到一個詞。 -bingli- 給 bingli 發送悄悄話 bingli 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 15:20:08

寫得不錯,請繼續寫。表揚1分鍾。 -sportwoman- 給 sportwoman 發送悄悄話 sportwoman 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 03:38:52

大概看了一眼~~ -lilac09- 給 lilac09 發送悄悄話 lilac09 的博客首頁 (999 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 07:44:43

多謝lilac09的指點,受益非淺。 -bingli- 給 bingli 發送悄悄話 bingli 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 15:16:52

估計是木表達好,這石橋可不是癡心啊,頭五百年是為了一睹芳容。 -bingli- 給 bingli 發送悄悄話 bingli 的博客首頁 (93 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 15:37:07

or: it was as if time stood still -sportwoman- 給 sportwoman 發送悄悄話 sportwoman 的博客首頁 (498 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 08:26:36

謝師妹。以後請多+指點。 -bingli- 給 bingli 發送悄悄話 bingli 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 16:45:37

瞬間就是永恒 -doitthen- 給 doitthen 發送悄悄話 doitthen 的博客首頁 (79 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 12:43:51

大俠你好!好詩。 -sportwoman- 給 sportwoman 發送悄悄話 sportwoman 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 14:25:41

doitthen兄弟原來也是詩人一枚,這麽好才華,多點灌水啦, -bingli- 給 bingli 發送悄悄話 bingli 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 04/18/2012 postreply 15:29:28

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