非常精準呀, 你說的都很好, 沒一塊廢磚,語感很棒, 大謝!

來源: lilac09 於 2011-07-24 16:45:40 [] [博客] [舊帖] [給我悄悄話] 閱讀數 : (493 bytes)
本帖於 2011-07-24 17:26:12 時間, 由版主 林貝卡 編輯

這句話可以當病句教材了. :)

How about I changed it this way:

Angelina Jolie delivered an Oscar-caliber performance, who totally disappeared into her role as a heart-broken but strong willed mom. Although her son got kidnapped, she never gave up her hope and had the guts to take on the whole corrupted LAPD to finally get the truth surfaced.

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• 我還是覺得那個who跟在performance之後不好。 -非文學青年- ♀ 給 非文學青年 發送悄悄話 非文學青年 的博客首頁 (661 bytes) () 07/24/2011 postreply 22:01:03

• 短句好，長的頭暈 -selfselfself- ♂ 給 selfselfself 發送悄悄話 selfselfself 的博客首頁 (347 bytes) () 07/24/2011 postreply 22:44:40

• Good rewriting~ -lilac09- ♀ 給 lilac09 發送悄悄話 lilac09 的博客首頁 (579 bytes) () 07/25/2011 postreply 07:19:43

• I think yours conveys what I am trying to express. Much better t -lilac09- ♀ 給 lilac09 發送悄悄話 lilac09 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 07/25/2011 postreply 07:13:29

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