英詩漢譯 I Think I Should Have Loved You Presently by Edna St. Vince

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對我，這是一首比較難翻譯的詩。我不敢說我翻譯得對。歡迎討論。

I Think I Should Have Loved You Presently

by Edna St. Vincent Millay

I think I should have loved you presently,

And given in earnest words I flung in jest;

And lifted honest eyes for you to see,

And caught your hand against my cheek and breast;

And all my pretty follies flung aside

That won you to me, and beneath your gaze,

Naked of reticence and shorn of pride,

Spread like a chart my little wicked ways.

I, that had been to you, had you remained,

But one more waking from a recurrent dream,

Cherish no less the certain stakes I gained,

And walk your memory’s halls, austere, supreme,

A ghost in marble of a girl you knew

Who would have loved you in a day or two.

我想我沒準兒很快愛上你by Edna St. Vincent Millay

翻譯：高興

我想我沒準兒很快愛上你,

對你誠懇地講話而不是躲閃回避；

並且抬起誠實的雙眼給你看，

讓你用手在我的臉頰和胸前遊弋；

並且把所有的嬌柔矯揉造作一並收起

即使它們曾為我贏得了你，並任你上下凝睇，

去掉保留，撇掉自尊，

平攤開來，讓我嬌嗔的樣子一覽無餘。

如果我早就這樣做，我們不會分離，

但我再次被從類似的夢中喚起，

過去那些教訓絕對不能忘記，

這樣，我從你記憶的殿堂走出，冷靜，高傲地，

如大理石雕像的幽靈，那個你似乎了解的女孩，

她沒準兒一兩天後會愛上你。

這是一首講愛情的詩。即使在英語世界，人們在分析作者的本意時，也有兩種猜測。一種是男人拋棄女人，另一種是女人拋棄男人。後一種見解是少數，我隻見過一篇文章。見： http://www.pipsqueakery.net/poetry-thursday-edna-st-vincent-millay-and-the-sassy-love-sonnet/ 但我的分析與此文章相近，因此按這一思路作的翻譯。我把這一翻譯放在這裏以期引起討論。

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