兩日不見妹， 熊心皆已碎

wind cracks, waves splash and wheels grind
a listless bear lies there with a blank stare
almost all travelers have got on board
and now the ship is being unanchored

the loving bird has not yet come
though she once promised the voyage
the drifting bottle contains no message
the rusting leaves carry no word

will the bear survive the heartbreak
if the voyage is only a dream?

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• 看來真是心碎了，商賴也不會寫了。少了一節 -忘俠- ♂ (99 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 15:07:07

• 俠客， 少了一節是愛沒了。我本不想壓韻，既然俠客請求， 我就加點韻吧 -bearsback- ♂ (433 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:48:27

• 改得很漂亮。倆個版本同樣喜歡。 -忘俠- ♂ (38 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:03:26

• 一曲英雄傳奇 起伏無怨意; 再回首淚如雨 分隔天與地 -忘俠- ♂ (352 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 15:17:30

• what is hawl-bear? -laughs- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 16:01:22

• hawk. thanks. or "eagle-bear" -忘俠- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 16:05:41

• 問好，忘俠。你的網名讓我想起了23731241說過的：“放下才能快樂”。 -婉蕠- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 16:39:36

• 說得好。謝謝婉蕠。 -忘俠- ♂ (90 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 16:57:20

• 回複：說得好。謝謝婉蕠。 -婉蕠- ♀ (43 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:09:08

• 不會吧？ -我愛阿美- ♂ (60 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:12:07

• Really? -婉蕠- ♀ (23 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:15:12

• 回複：Really? -我愛阿美- ♂ (60 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:20:53

• Got it. Thank you. Have a nice weekend. -婉蕠- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:25:04

• you are smart. ha -忘俠- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:27:53

• you are right too. -忘俠- ♂ (66 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:15:51

• 回複：不會吧？ -EnLearner- ♀ (67 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:21:33

• true, -忘俠- ♂ (15 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:25:05

• yeah, -忘俠- ♂ (85 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:13:33

• 回複：yeah, -婉蕠- ♀ (18 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:16:09

• it's a good question for me to ask bearsback. -忘俠- ♂ (54 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:18:18

• 回複：回複：說得好。謝謝婉蕠。 -蒙蒙霧- ♀ (17 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:21:33

• my dear e-master. secret, secret... -忘俠- ♂ (25 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:22:53

• 回複：my dear e-master. secret, secret... -蒙蒙霧- ♀ (21 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:28:35

• 回複：回複：回複：說得好。謝謝婉蕠。 -婉蕠- ♀ (82 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:24:22

• hahaha, i like you.. -忘俠- ♂ (80 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:27:16

• Thank you. Have a nice Sunday. -婉蕠- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:37:49

• 好詩。 流利通順。 -bearsback- ♂ (56 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:11:24

• 飛向東方 -忘俠- ♂ (92 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:30:28

• 俠客，難道鷹妹她是追趕 -bearsback- ♂ (86 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:52:48

• 那我趕緊發sos告訴你鷹妹。讓她立馬落地，聽你的發落：） -忘俠- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:08:56

• 謝謝俠客。 -bearsback- ♂ (16 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:11:02

• 這句怎麽改好？ -忘俠- ♂ (164 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:34:33

• may be -bearsback- ♂ (131 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:09:48

• 你說的對。 -忘俠- ♂ (70 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:13:24

• 再送一首離別詩，後會有期 -忘俠- ♂ (259 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:47:45

• 斷背曲？ -蒙蒙霧- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:51:32

• 倆 -忘俠- ♂ (90 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:00:02

• 俠客， 中英都是上乘功夫 -bearsback- ♂ (86 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:57:31

• 你厲害。 你能看穿我的腦子 -忘俠- ♂ (66 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:06:27

• 俠客， 請為我告訴鷹妹 -bearsback- ♂ (14 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:12:53

• okok, so long... -忘俠- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:18:17

• 請告訴鷹妹 -bearsback- ♂ (123 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 14:54:09

• your鷹妹說： -忘俠- ♂ (86 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 15:10:57

• 你鷹說； -忘俠- ♂ (100 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 15:18:39

• oh no... -bearsback- ♂ (74 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:41:13

• hahahahahhahahahahaha -bearsback- ♂ (103 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:31:55

• think of 讀英文小說, -忘俠- ♂ (322 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:21:25

• 俠客 -bearsback- ♂ (282 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:53:49

• 你就別謙虛了。 -忘俠- ♂ (131 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 18:35:13

• that was the truth -bearsback- ♂ (80 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 19:40:45

• rustling -bearsback- ♂ (11 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 14:46:08

• and -忘俠- ♂ (379 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:05:16

• I like thinking big &acting small.. -忘俠- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:16:39

• i agree with you -bearsback- ♂ (310 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:44:43

• oh, i got u. yesterday -忘俠- ♂ (193 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 15:25:29

• haha -bearsback- ♂ (190 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:30:23