【批批改改】The intern whom I mentioned last time…

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The intern whom I mentioned last time with excellent communication skills had been in US army for three years.

He told me last Sunday after he solved another case perfectly. I wondered his experience before he was admitted in the residency program. And he told me the details. He said for the first sixth months in military traning, it was very tough. For a whole 連隊(英文怎麽說?I forgot now), if only one person made a mistake,than the whole 連隊 would do the training again, including wearing suits, running, etc. Sometimes, over one night, they had this traning several times.

So, the training in US army is very tough. The intern got promotion in the army. 

It is not surprising that he could solve some tough scenarios smoothly as an medical intern. He had excellent review in recent interns evaluation meeting by all of attendings who worked with him.  
 

(我隨便寫一寫,為了練習英文寫作,歡迎批改指正!)

 

Ibelieu大師修改的文章:(吉祥雨用紅筆標出作為對照)

Exemplar of native or native like English:

It turns out that intern with excellent communication skills, whom I mentioned in a previous post of mine, had been in the US Army for three years.  Last Sunday after he had solved another thorny case perfectly he told me this when I inquired about his pior experience before being admitted into the residency program.  He let me in on some very interesting details.  He said the first sixth months of military training were the toughest.  Even if just one of them messed up,the whole company would have to repeat whatever training routine they were going throughbe it suiting up,running,and what not.  Sometimes,they had to pull an all-nighter until everyone passed muster. 

So it seems that training in the US Army is very tough.  The intern did very well and got promotion in the Army. 

Given this background, it's no surprise that he can function competently in tough scenarios as a medical intern.  At a  recent intern evaluation meeting, he received excellent reviews from all the attendees who had worked with him.  

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歡迎大家批改。Johnie呢?:) -妖妖靈- 給 妖妖靈 發送悄悄話 妖妖靈 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 02/25/2022 postreply 17:34:20

僅供參考: -ibelieu- 給 ibelieu 發送悄悄話 ibelieu 的博客首頁 (1177 bytes) () 02/25/2022 postreply 18:29:46

哇塞!!!寫得太好太好啦!大師,萬分感謝!!這樣太有助於英文寫作提高啦!美壇可以玩【批批改改】節目!:) -妖妖靈- 給 妖妖靈 發送悄悄話 妖妖靈 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 02/25/2022 postreply 18:35:23

原文挺好,我隻是就著原文稍加整理而已。 -ibelieu- 給 ibelieu 發送悄悄話 ibelieu 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 02/25/2022 postreply 18:40:19

獲益匪淺。美壇別的節目是主持人當老師,這個批批改改是主持人當學生。希望能玩起來:) -妖妖靈- 給 妖妖靈 發送悄悄話 妖妖靈 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 02/25/2022 postreply 19:06:37

@@信大師把我寫的英文給批改了一下,天,改完之後是出版水平!歡迎大家來玩這個遊戲!像Johnie說的,好英文是改出來的! -妖妖靈- 給 妖妖靈 發送悄悄話 妖妖靈 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 02/25/2022 postreply 18:39:00

a nice writing though, bravo to yoyo:) -忒忒綠- 給 忒忒綠 發送悄悄話 忒忒綠 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 02/26/2022 postreply 08:13:00

謝謝綠詩人,喜歡看到大家改一改,非常有幫助:) -妖妖靈- 給 妖妖靈 發送悄悄話 妖妖靈 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 02/26/2022 postreply 09:23:34

謝謝110拋玉引玉,把自己架在火上烤,作為非英語專業人士,寫得很不錯,“我信你”改得妙,當屬exemplary,現對比 -吉祥雨- 給 吉祥雨 發送悄悄話 吉祥雨 的博客首頁 (11352 bytes) () 02/26/2022 postreply 08:35:38

謝謝吉祥雨花時間把原文和修改文對比總結出來!我會把它稍後放在原文中,在你的總結之上,我用藍筆接著補一些漏和寫寫心得: -妖妖靈- 給 妖妖靈 發送悄悄話 妖妖靈 的博客首頁 (14450 bytes) () 02/26/2022 postreply 09:15:35

也歡迎你參加每周五的一句話翻譯,寫作業的過程學了很多,而且Idiom對表達地道英語幫助太大了:) -妖妖靈- 給 妖妖靈 發送悄悄話 妖妖靈 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 02/26/2022 postreply 09:19:28

恭喜妖妖。首頁進來,謝謝網管,批批改改The intern whom I mentioned last time推薦成功 -梅雨潭- 給 梅雨潭 發送悄悄話 (0 bytes) () 02/26/2022 postreply 10:11:09

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