不是當外人，這兩天工作上忙了點兒。挑了幾顆磚

寫得非常好！I like it very much!

我用詞conservative，我沒見過的不敢用，我覺得你就有點兒太膽大了，哈哈，we need to find a middle ground.

(1) her heart sagged. 我從沒聽到過sag這樣用的，what's wrong with sank?

(2) But as a self-claimed amateur artist with good looks, ->self-acclaimed?

（3）One day, suddenly he didn’t reply her emails any more and he no longer visited the photography forum. 我會直接說： One day, he stopped replying her emails and visiting the photogrphy forum.

（4）two my best pieces I wanna share with you. two of my best pieces

最後情節上，我有點不明白為啥also for the very last time in her whole life? 她沒有自殺吧？還是她決定再也不看雪了？

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• 謝謝班長這麽忙，還幫俺看文，敬禮 -lilac09- ♀ (10103 bytes) () 09/20/2011 postreply 12:47:21

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• 哈哈~ -lilac09- ♀ (1624 bytes) () 09/20/2011 postreply 14:54:27

• 哦，好像是。 -非文學青年- ♀ (184 bytes) () 09/20/2011 postreply 15:32:04