Overall,great work!
1. who strive to be good readers,strive沒有表達出設法做而且成功的概念。
2. The people who love to read--> Those who love to read
3. With a book in the hand, 我覺得有點怪
4. Without any conscious effort,-->efforts?
5. their imagination, which will greatly benefit them in future.
which clause 跟在imagination後麵,指imagination的話不太對。