Esoteric
2006-01-06 11:35:06
Esoteric
Mmmmm . . .
The art of eating
the ripened peach,
the fullness of sun & spring
rain . . . thunders in summer
& silent blossoms
of a frosty dawn --
the tongue
finally ceased
to fight the sound
The happiest song
that won’t go wrong
Mmmmm . . .
I see you slowly unfrown,
a joy freshly found
like a particular body ache
reminding you love
is still going strong:
expanding each cell
opening each
forgotten shell
Mmmmm . . .
The body remembers
all the small songs,
frabjous or remorse,
trapped in your heart,
chest and lungs:
Violence of the young
wingless nights
now gently touched
flattened out . . .
Out
Mmmmm . . .
Try to recall the first
river you bathed in, the
first words that burnt
your neck and ears, the
first kiss you were too young
to taste, the first blow of the wind
that broke the sail, the
first . . . the
first . . .
Mmmmm . . .
The O closes
into an almost-smile
Memory unearthing memory
Heart burying heart
Either tethered or ether, like being feathered,
or do you rather
. . . ?
Mmmmm . . .
Let yourself go!
Let your heart breathe, rest
unguarded for a moment.
Forget the million nevers & evers,
‘cause neither will outlast
this voiceless, unmitigated
flow of what deeply
matters, or
does it?
Mmmmm . . .
+
z.z.
2006
知凡 發表評論於
2006-01-09 10:49:52
水滴你的嗓子真好!!! 謝謝分享!!!
我也好喜歡韓紅!!! 流行歌手中她應該算是我的“新歡 ”:))) 她的聲音天然地牽動人心,自然而柔情。。。
影雲 發表評論於
2006-01-08 14:24:40
thanks, i will; when i figure out how to use the software, i will record my mom's songs and share with your guys too :)
yah, i love the "out-of-control" in your voice in the ending; indeed, this song should be more natural, i mean, emotions less controlled by a singer, which is like opening . . . my feeling. . . but i think you sing it very well .
by水滴 發表評論於
2006-01-08 13:37:47
YY: You said that this song is your mom's favorate. Please say hi to her.
The last part is very challenge, almost 2 octave range.
影雲 發表評論於
2006-01-08 13:00:53
like this song a lot , especially the ending part . . .
:)
by水滴 發表評論於
2006-01-08 12:29:56
A real life is imperfect.
A real person is imperfect.
A professional has a whole team works for her. She has professional recording instruments. She can sing several times, can cut-paste the best sentences together. Of course, she laways practices each song hundreds times to make it perfect. :)
LTG 發表評論於
2006-01-08 12:06:11
the most challenging song you have ever posted ... [?]
good job!!
i have a couple of albums by Han Hong ... this song is included....
thank you so much for sharing.....
i feel you have more potential to make it higher in the first half...right?
i prefer the imperfect sound quality to the "perfect" ones....
yours is real....home style....:)
by水滴 發表評論於
2006-01-08 10:56:21
伴奏用的是消音版,所以有雜音。
by水滴 發表評論於
2006-01-08 10:20:18
I sang this one about a month ago.
青藏高原
呀啦索哎
是誰帶來遠古的呼喚
是誰留下千年的祈盼
難道說還有無言的歌
還是那久久不能忘懷的眷戀
哦我看見一座座山一座座山川
一座座山川相連
呀啦索
那可是青藏高原
是誰日夜遙望著藍天
是誰渴望永久的夢幻
難道說還有讚美的歌
還是那仿佛不能改變的莊嚴
哦我看見一座座山一座座山川
一座座山川相連
呀啦索
那就是青藏高原
LTG 發表評論於
2006-01-07 23:24:11
enjoy reading both of your versions!!
smooth....your wrod choices are very well-thourght and -paced....!!!
both titles are very intersting...never thought of that myself :)
sexy?
Mmmmm, maybe...:)
i think poems, either sad or happy, should all be sexy!!!
知凡 發表評論於
2006-01-07 19:07:05
"僻徑"
嗯嗯嗯嗯 。。。
吃的藝術
熟美的桃
豐盈裏陽光和春天的
雨。。。夏日的雷聲
霜寒黎明裏
默默的花簇
舌頭
終於停止
抗爭這聲音
不會走調的
最快樂歌聲
嗯嗯嗯嗯 。。。
我看著你慢慢舒開眉頭
新發現的歡愉
如同肉體某個特有的痛
告慰著你 愛
依然在逐漸堅強
舒展每一個細胞
開放每一個
被遺忘的矜持
嗯嗯嗯嗯 。。。
肉體記得
所有細微的歌
愉悅或自責
陷在你的心,
胸和肺:
年輕的狂熱
無翼的夜晚
現已輕柔地被觸摸
撫平伸展。。。
溢去
嗯嗯嗯嗯 。。。
試著回想第一條
你浴洗的河,
第一句你麵紅耳赤的話語,
年少未能品味的第一個吻
第一陣吹破你船帆的風
第一次。。。
第一次。。。
嗯嗯嗯嗯 。。。
“O”收合
成一個幾乎的微笑
記憶掘著記憶
心埋於心
束緊或天堂
像是帶著翅膀
或許你寧願
。。。?
放開你自己
讓心呼吸,
不必設防地歇息一刻
忘掉千百萬的“決不”與“始終”
因為任一都不會經久於這
清音的全然的
最深之處
緊要的流淌,
要緊嗎?
嗯嗯嗯嗯 。。。
+
很美很性感裹著心與智的一首詩!!!隻是我的中文很難翻譯出原文的聲響和流動的性感。。。
謝謝分享!!!
:)
影雲 發表評論於
2006-01-07 18:00:10
那鮮為人知的
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
吃的藝術
熟透的桃,
陽光與春雨的
飽滿。。。夏日的滾雷
經霜的黎明裏
沉默的綻放 - -
舌
終於停止
與音的抗爭
那是一首永不迷途
最快樂的歌
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
我見到你的眉頭緩緩舒開,
新近找到的歡樂
如同身體某個特別的痛
讓你想起愛
逐日增長:
舒展每一個細胞
打開每一個
被遺忘的貝殼
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
身體能記起
所有細微的歌聲
快樂的,悲情的
牢套在你的心,
胸與肺裏:
年輕無翼的夜
的瘋狂
現在輕輕地被觸摸
撫平而流溢
出來。。
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
試圖回憶最初
你沐浴過河,最初
燃燒你的頸與耳的話語,最初
因你太年青而無法品味的吻,最初
風破碎船帆的一擊,最初
。。。最
初。。。
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
“O”圍成
一個微笑
回憶翻耕著回憶
心埋葬著心
無論緊綁,還是衝入雲霄,
如同羽翼豐滿,
或許你寧願
。。。?
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
放開自己!
讓你的心呼吸,平靜
一刻無防。
忘掉千百萬的“永不”與“曾經”,
因為沒有什麽
可以超越
這無聲,永不平息
的流淌
來自心靈深處
的流淌,
是不是?
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
:
非常非常的美感動。。。深層次的。。。
水滴的感覺還真不錯。。。
LTG 發表評論於
2006-01-06 14:49:40
y.y.
yeah, it's about sounds and lungs :)
and how they are made....
s.d.
if you think it's for you, then it's for you :))
cheers everyone!
by水滴 發表評論於
2006-01-06 12:45:31
feel like this one you written for me. :)) only my projective thinking...
影雲 發表評論於
2006-01-06 11:46:43
. . .
very beautiful
& joyful,cheerful,imagery . . love
the poem as if falling
into the pond
of sounds
. . .
Esoteric
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Esoteric
Mmmmm . . .
The art of eating
the ripened peach,
the fullness of sun & spring
rain . . . thunders in summer
& silent blossoms
of a frosty dawn --
the tongue
finally ceased
to fight the sound
The happiest song
that won’t go wrong
Mmmmm . . .
I see you slowly unfrown,
a joy freshly found
like a particular body ache
reminding you love
is still going strong:
expanding each cell
opening each
forgotten shell
Mmmmm . . .
The body remembers
all the small songs,
frabjous or remorse,
trapped in your heart,
chest and lungs:
Violence of the young
wingless nights
now gently touched
flattened out . . .
Out
Mmmmm . . .
Try to recall the first
river you bathed in, the
first words that burnt
your neck and ears, the
first kiss you were too young
to taste, the first blow of the wind
that broke the sail, the
first . . . the
first . . .
Mmmmm . . .
The O closes
into an almost-smile
Memory unearthing memory
Heart burying heart
Either tethered or ether, like being feathered,
or do you rather
. . . ?
Mmmmm . . .
Let yourself go!
Let your heart breathe, rest
unguarded for a moment.
Forget the million nevers & evers,
‘cause neither will outlast
this voiceless, unmitigated
flow of what deeply
matters, or
does it?
Mmmmm . . .
+
z.z.
2006