3rd line

At first I was writing:
untold is a beautiful story
which unfolds only in memory

then I thought it was a little too complicated. I changed to
untold a beautiful story
unfolds only in memory

I was thinking like this at the time:
a beautiful story untold

now I think it makes more sense if we add a comma:
untold, a beautiful story
unfolds only in memory

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• oh, i see. thanks. -戲雨飛鷹- ♀ (175 bytes) () 11/26/2010 postreply 11:07:20

• would be 'an untold':) -falsetruth- ♀ (0 bytes) () 11/26/2010 postreply 11:50:33

• haha, 對。不能怪我，我初中沒畢業。 -戲雨飛鷹- ♀ (0 bytes) () 11/26/2010 postreply 12:02:45