3rd line

來源: 於 2010-11-26 10:43:00 [舊帖] [給我悄悄話] 本文已被閱讀：次

At first I was writing:
untold is a beautiful story
which unfolds only in memory

then I thought it was a little too complicated. I changed to
untold a beautiful story
unfolds only in memory

I was thinking like this at the time:
a beautiful story untold

now I think it makes more sense if we add a comma:
untold, a beautiful story
unfolds only in memory