ok, 喜歡這種討論，深木 新同學~ :)

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回答: 【古詩意譯】山行（唐）杜牧 由 lilac09 於 2010-06-13 07:16:25

nestled deeply “into” the white clouds
"into" sounds better than "in"
=>agree

the evening glow is casting the autumnal woods
你可以說cast light on，但好象不可以說light is casting sth
cast投射，投，但沒有“投射光”的意思，你要explicitly加上光，要麽被動
=>the evening glow is being cast on the autumnal woods

the maple leaves goes brighter than the red spring flowers
=>“go” makes it vivid
but there is also go in “My carriage stops and I forget to go~ ”
=>try to avoid duplicate main words in poem.


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