沒命MM, 謝你的表揚!我都臉紅了。文中有好幾個錯誤:
1.making me a day: making my day
2.what name it is: what its name is
3.he hadn't got yet: he hadn't given one yet
4. when I tried first a little bit: I first tried....
5. when he dose: when he does
6. please see another direction:please see another shot
希望版主能給幫助該過來。另外,多用形容詞是初級寫作,高級的寫作應該多用並列句,排比句。比如:as bueatiful as..., as well.... and so on.
回複:親愛的波影:能公開你的秘密嗎?
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對不起,叫錯你名了, 應稱你明MM, 請原諒!
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