暖冬謬讚了。這幾句是SUNO加的:)我的原詩很簡單的。

本帖於 2024-06-14 10:34:44 時間, 由普通用戶 甜蟲蟲 編輯

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When doubt comes in
Clouds start piling up in the sky
Layer upon layer
Till all the lights are out

It's dark and cold inside and out
No layers of clothes can block the wind
That comes from the cold land

A storm is forming
It's getting stronger every minute
I see it
I sense it
Yet, I can't do anything about it
I can't change the directions

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When doubt comes in Clouds start piling up the sky這個鋪墊開場很好 -暖冬cool夏- 給 暖冬cool夏 發送悄悄話 暖冬cool夏 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 06/13/2024 postreply 21:18:21

Thank you! I'm glad you think so :) -甜蟲蟲- 給 甜蟲蟲 發送悄悄話 甜蟲蟲 的博客首頁 (164 bytes) () 06/14/2024 postreply 08:54:20

Missed a preposition in the second verse :) -甜蟲蟲- 給 甜蟲蟲 發送悄悄話 甜蟲蟲 的博客首頁 (0 bytes) () 06/14/2024 postreply 10:35:32

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