Did you read it?

(1)   
On a Quiet Night

I saw the moon light before my couch,

And wondered if it were not the frost on the ground.

I raised my head and looked out on the mountain noon,

I bowed my head and though of my far-off home.

(TR. S Obata)

(2)   
A Tranquil Night

Abed, I see a silver light,

I wonder if it’s frost aground.

Looking up, I find the moon bright,

Bowing in homesickness I’m drowned.

(許淵衝譯)

These are first two translated poems from the link. I assume this is a published essay. I didn’t read the Chinese part, too long.

Version(1)
I can tell it is still English. But there is a typo “though”.

Version(2)
I almost choked on “I’m drowned”. Didn't he have better word for it? At least, it is not "adrowned"?   

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• 回複：obviously, drowned is not right -聚曦亭- ♀ (3891 bytes) () 07/30/2013 postreply 05:31:32