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Sonorously quiet,
He drove on.

Wind pounding on the window,
Accompanying his trip,
To another town.

Tears burst into his eyes,
Sorrowfulness held his tongue.

How he hopes,
He were in that train soon,
On the journey back,
To his home country,
To his home town.

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• 請各位打俠指正，新周愉快！ -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 05:43:24

• Nice ... So Nice ... -Lucidus- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 07:00:14

• Hello Lucidus, have a nice day! -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 07:24:27

• 滴答老師，小釗大俠給你提提意見 ：） -小釗- ♂ (1202 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 08:05:11

• 提的好，謝謝，聽我一一道來, 再考慮如何改 -yingyudidida- ♂ (5510 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 09:27:39

• 加了一個： 無題 （v.2) -yingyudidida- ♂ (1136 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 09:36:00

• 真摯感人的詩，謝分享。 -楚姍珊- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 09:27:04

• 謝謝，是班長吧！ -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 09:29:41

• 讀了你的詩，耳邊響起了費翔《故鄉的雲》(1987春節晚會): -楚姍珊- ♀ (568 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 09:54:58

• 記得出國前大家一起喝酒，我的一個哥哥哭了，他說對不起他眼窩淺 -yingyudidida- ♂ (39 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 10:21:39

• 問候yingyudidida，謝謝分享。 -楚姍珊- ♀ (1780 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 11:07:43

• 謝謝姍珊！ -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 11:44:45

• 好詩。上次回國看到火車窗外大雪紛飛，我想到童年。 -bearsback- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 13:14:27

• 謝謝bear，我也是自娛自樂，寫東西還是向你們眾高手學習。 -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 14:42:28

• Bill好牛啊！應該也讀出來。鼓掌！ -beautifulwind- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 17:27:11

• 是要讀，謝謝。 -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 05:39:13

• 從讀詩到寫詩，祝賀BILL大俠更上一層樓！ -ntotl- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 23:37:12

• Never Too Old To Learn - 謝謝。 -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 05:38:26

• 報告ntotl,他以前就寫過詩的呀,[I am a leaf]就是其中的一首: -楚姍珊- ♀ (133 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 07:38:00

• 紫君記性好愛心濃偶像啊。 -billnet- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 08:09:01

• 是你的詩寫得好,所以我就記住了。“偶像”可不敢當呀，過獎了。 -紫君- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 08:48:19

• 慚愧。美壇育人，繼續深造爭取當個好學生。 -billnet- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 09:19:15

• 一起學習，共同進步。 -紫君- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 09:58:20

• 就是就是，這樣是好！！ -billnet- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/22/2013 postreply 11:14:36