1)Imagine you were your reader who, after an exhausting weekend, maybe with a hangover, or maybe after struggling with Hurricane Irene, wakes up in the morning, scans through the forum while eating breakfast, or sits down at his/her office desk, only to find your long essay to pick grammatical errors from.
>>Who 似乎離謂語太遠，後麵東西又太多，可不可以分成兩句
Imagine you were a reader. After an exhausting weekend with a hangover or a restless night struggling with Hurricane Irene, you wake up in the morning blah blah, only to find blah blah
Hate to say: you are right. I will change the first part to : Imagine you were one of your readers.
2)I am not going to risk getting laid reading your essay and missing my Monday one-on-one with my manager! (“off” is omitted intentionally. Haha).
>>加個due to , 要不原因結果不太通
I am not going to risk getting laid (due to) reading your essay and missing my Monday one-on-one with my manager! (“off” is omitted intentionally. Haha).
字典上查到：brave people who risked being killed to help others， so I will change reading your essay to "to read your essay",再把missing部分放前麵。happy now? :)
以下的句子好像都有run on問題
3)Be arrogant, show off and offend, that way, people could get annoyed by your attitude and throw bricks at you.
>> “that way” 可以連句子嗎?
Be arrogant, show off and offend. In that way, people could get annoyed by your attitude and throw bricks at you.
darn it!
4)how social media websites are influencing the teenagers, are they good or bad?
>> run on sentence error by using “,”
I am losing this game!
5) You have all the time of the world, maybe even pick up a fight with someone that equals your level, that way, you get to know each other better and even become good friends, like Lilac and me.
>>什麽邏輯在“You have all the time of the world” and “may be….”之間, 缺連詞
>>“that way” 可以連句子嗎
Same as 3). I will change.
