hope it won't bother the writer.

 The article seems quite sincere, but it is full of errors, especially with verbs.
   First, your experience of the movie would be better couched in the past: "...every minute was rivieting," "Watching it was...," etc.
   In general, you seem to be thinking too much but not enough, choosing awkward "writing" instead of natural language. For instance, "The moment I realized it, it was already half an hour past the pick up time" is just ghastly. Why don't you say, "I suddenly realized I was a half hour late." We already know what you're going to late for.

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• Thank you for your thoughtful review~ -lilac09- ♀ (3341 bytes) () 07/27/2011 postreply 22:23:20