孩子在學校被欺負受傷，請大夥給看看這樣寫行不行

下麵是寫給老師和校長的信，請各位給指正一下。如果可能，請幫我修改一下QQH給我。多謝！

To: xxxx Elementary School

Dear Mrs. xxx and Dr. xxx,

We are A's parents. This letter is to report that we found our daughter, A, was hurt by violence in the school. A said B pushed her down to the floor and kicked her on Monday, March 26, 2009. A lot of students saw the violence. A said she never do anything unfriendly to B. There are two pieces of skin hurts in A's right leg. We took the picture as evident. Please review the picture. Picture was taken on March 26, 2009.

We need a fair resolution for this violence. We require that B and her parents apologize for her violence and promise not to do it again. The school should prevent any further violence to my daughter or any other students.

We keep the right to take any further legal actions against this kind of school violence.

所有跟帖： 

• 這個，這個拿不出手吧 -caliber- ♂ (71 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 15:50:34

• 小孩子打架的事，不想搞得真象法律文書一樣 -關鍵字- ♂ (36 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 16:01:34

• 回複：小孩子打架的事，不想搞得真象法律文書一樣 -caliber- ♂ (670 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 16:12:38

• 多謝Caliber和老貓指點，看這樣寫行不行 -關鍵字- ♂ (611 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 16:44:39

• 回複：孩子在學校被欺負受傷，請大夥給看看這樣寫行不行 -單身老貓- ♂ (219 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 16:05:09

• 尊敬的老貓 -16818- ♀ (66 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 16:21:25

• 1) Post your question 子女教育 forum. People there can give -Comfort.- ♀ (492 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 16:55:03

• 謝謝，根據你的建議又改了一句 -關鍵字- ♂ (156 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 17:01:33

• 這樣的寫法千萬不要拿出去， 建議找個英文好的人幫忙些的專業一些 -355parkave- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 17:29:28

• as evident, 改成 as evidence. -wistara- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 19:35:04

• 多謝大家，明天就這麽交吧 -關鍵字- ♂ (644 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 19:55:46

• 回複：多謝大家，明天就這麽交吧 -單身老貓- ♂ (943 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 22:25:31

• 同時請仔細看一下這個網站的資料 -單身老貓- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 22:28:32

• 回複：同時請仔細看一下這個網站的資料 -單身老貓- ♂ (104 bytes) () 03/26/2009 postreply 22:29:52

• 謝謝貓兄。已經將這封短信交到學校了。 -關鍵字- ♂ (24 bytes) () 03/27/2009 postreply 07:30:37