要改的地方太多了,我時間有限,試改一下第一段。。。

回答: 請幫忙修改我的回信我會告知結果的展望20122011-11-09 08:22:03

As you can see from my resume, my qualifications including mutiple skill sets, analytical skills, presentation skills, and multi-tasking skills just perfectly match with the job requirements on this position.  Also, I have years of hand on working experience in xxx industry. In addition, I am a good team player. Last, I have proven track records with B company.

Here is the reasons why I have strong interest to apply for this position:

....(我沒有時間了, my two cents, )

1. My last position was xxx when I worked for B Company, same job grade as this one.

2. I would like to come back to work for B company. I have targeted B Company as the place where I want to spend my career, which is congenial and better structured.

3. I always look for an opportunity to work for xxx department, which especially utilize my strengths, analytical skill and multi-tasking skill. My last position was xxx. With the increased regulatory scrutiny, I don’t find the xxx work as interesting as I once did. This position has nothing/little to do with regulatory stuff. I think the job I am applying for now is very interesting, finding ways to improve the bottom line.

4. I want to do a sector switch. My past experience was mainly for Commercial business. Baby Boomers are about to create a record population explosion in Medicare, I believe which is a fast growing field for the next 30 years.

5. It is a telecommuting position. So I don’t need to relocate.

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