【加隊】試翻一打油Limerick

 

A flea and a fly in a flue,

Were trapped and knew not what to do,

Said the fly , 'Let us flee'

'Let us fly', said the flea,

So they flew through a flaw in the flue.

飛蠅跳蚤哦掉煙笛

愁臉對看啊苦希希

飛蠅催，“快，咱跳”

“不，咱飛”， 跳蚤叫

虧有一孔兄弟終逃離

第一句也可改作“飛蠅跳蚤哦煙道迷”，謝壇友們指正。limerick字義淺顯，覺得沒必要意譯。這裏我用一個漢字對應一個音節來譯，想盡量翻出裏麵的節奏和趣味。

所有跟帖： 

• Nice ... -Lucidus- ♂ (29 bytes) () 02/08/2013 postreply 21:17:34

• 多謝指正。已做了更正改動。 -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/09/2013 postreply 04:19:13

• Good! Does this flue refer to chimney? -聚曦亭- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/08/2013 postreply 21:53:56

• 多謝指正。沒錯，flue是煙囪裏麵的煙管或煙道，覺得這也太大太容易逃掉，做了改動。銀應寫作煙. -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/09/2013 postreply 03:49:45

• Ding！ -beautifulwind- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/08/2013 postreply 22:42:19

• 再看看改進版和說明？：）） -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/09/2013 postreply 04:21:40

• 回複：：））不知道煙囪裏的煙管是什麽樣的？恭喜發財！萬事如意！：） -淘金客- ♂ (45 bytes) () 02/09/2013 postreply 06:48:32

• 回複：An Interesting limerick!Thank you for the new version! They r -淘金客- ♂ (46 bytes) () 02/09/2013 postreply 06:54:03

• 鼓掌!過年好! -rockcurrent- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/09/2013 postreply 21:22:34

• 謝了。新春快樂！ -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/10/2013 postreply 09:10:00