林木過謙了,你譯得很棒,自己博客裏寫的詩也好.常來啊！試試這個

My father was unavailable, and my mother

looked like she was about to break,

and not into blossom, every time I spoke. 

我父親不在，我母親

像要瀕臨崩潰

而非笑逐顏開，每當我說話

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• 謝謝京燕，感覺這樣更貼切。break into blossom -LinMu- ♂ (76 bytes) () 07/02/2014 postreply 14:54:11

• Not into blossom要不就用“而非心花怒放”吧,比我前麵選的"笑逐顏開"貼切~~~ -京燕花園- ♀ (157 bytes) () 07/02/2014 postreply 16:26:47

• 謝謝京燕指點，笑納了（^.^） -LinMu- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/03/2014 postreply 15:06:14