這篇《History》文書能為她拿下哈佛錄取嗎？

白人女生的爬藤文書

GPA: ???

Tests: ???

ECs: ...chosen to US Senate Youth Program... 新聞報道說去白宮見了總統（川）後很興奮。

Admitted: Duke & Yale

 

Dressed as tiny pilgrim in a summer camp, my passion for history commenced at eight years of age. I dipped candles, made my own Mayflower model out of popsicle sticks, and got my first glimpse into what I owe to those who came before me for the hardship they endured. I also discovered that I had ancestor, John Howland on the Mayflower. I found it hilarious that it was my relative who famously fell off the ship relieving himself.

A couple of years later, I felt the weight of history as I stood on the old North Bridge in Concord Massachusetts. I felt its significance captivated my young soul as I realized my freedom is possible because of those brave and determined men and women who saw a different future for themselves and their country. History became than just words on the page of a dusty book.

Today, history continues to be a live and ever-changing for me. Museums are some of my favorite places, particularly the National World War II Museum and the Holocaust Museum. History is always being created even while the past is shaping the future.

The remnants of my historical obsessions clutter my bedroom. Next to m y bulletin board, there is a piece from the massive Berlin Wall replica I created in seventh grade. On a shelf nearby sits a model Titanic I got at 9 years old. In the corner hangs the white banner of Joan of Arc that I sewed. On my laptop is a sticker of the flag of the French Resistance. And above my desk is a gum wrapper given to me by the Berlin Airlift candy bomber himself.

These exploration of the past has shaped my into who I am today. I am partly the quirky young girl so obsessed with the story of the Titanic that she watched every documentary and dressed up as a survivor to perform her own 10-minute play. Another part of me is the teenager interested in World War II, who spent time at Normandy filling the tragedy of D-Day and who served as the national World War II ambassador interviewing World War II veterans.

My fascination with history isn’t confined to just a battle or an event. I am enthralled by the history of people. History matters to me because it tells the story of passionate individuals. As I listened to the story of veterans, I began to see the past through an empathetic point of view. Learning of the sacrifices soldiers and patriots made for me freedom has filled me the appreciation for the rights that I have.

This gratitude has inspired me become engaged in politics and government to honor what they did by fighting for the rights of others. It led me to successfully advocate for the student representation to the SSSS (a state) Board of Education in the form of Student Advisory Council.

The legacy of those who paved the way moves me to make my own history with the goal of creating a pattern of diplomacy helping to create a more unified world. This responsibility to follow in their footsteps compels me to be fearless. The connection I felt when I stood on the beaches of Normandy or in the East Room of the White House reminds me of where I come from and where I need to go.

I learn about the present by looking to the past whether by examining the Revolutionary War to understand modern political revolutions or by looking at previous civil rights movements to contemplate causes such as March For Our Lives. History inspires me to pursue my own dreams as I see how individuals like Joan of Arc refused to comply with the status quo. Their examples motivate me to see past the box the world puts me in and to view my own possibilities as limitless.

• 不用文書，都已經夠了，除非是Republican -avw- ♀   (0 bytes) (11 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 11:41:51

• 就是見了川很興奮，出來新聞都報了 -賈平凸- ♂    (73 bytes) (52 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 11:43:58

• 那就死了，除非拚爹。不過去白宮本身就是拚爹項目。這種不看文書的。應該也不是自己寫的 -avw- ♀   (0 bytes) (9 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 11:44:54

• 再多透露一條，耶魯拒了她，但杜克錄了。覺得哈佛該不該錄？ -賈平凸- ♂    (0 bytes) (6 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 11:48:54

• 她寫得其實還可以，我會給A。哈佛的立場我不感興趣 -avw- ♀   (0 bytes) (7 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 11:50:33

• 讚這眼光！ -賈平凸- ♂    (156 bytes) (90 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 11:55:18

• 文書寫的真心一般。杜克錄了是不是因為stats很高？ -無風自飛- ♀   (0 bytes) (6 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 12:04:10

• 對，Stats肯定高，杜克就是有這個眼光 -賈平凸- ♂    (0 bytes) (6 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 12:07:43

• 單從文書以及文書中透露的EC，應該木有進H -無風自飛- ♀   (0 bytes) (7 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 12:12:45

• 讚這眼光！ -賈平凸- ♂    (0 bytes) (4 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:05:33

• 巧妙的揭示了自己的家庭背景，但是對曆史的理解太膚淺 -windyLL- ♀   (0 bytes) (18 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 12:10:31

• 覺得挺不錯的，但沒有stats光看文章說不準，有了足夠stats,這篇文章應該是錄了 -米湯- ♂    (0 bytes) (2 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 12:31:20

• 我沒有她Stats -賈平凸- ♂    (0 bytes) (2 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:06:08

• 我也覺得對曆史的理解太表麵，曆史是個沉重的話題，這個裏麵看不到反思 -最愛韭菜盒子- ♀   (28 bytes) (13 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 12:53:54

• 一共就400年曆史，除了把蘿卜李推倒，就是把蘿卜李再立起來。 -賈平凸- ♂    (48 bytes) (11 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:07:42

• 不是的，曆史上真正發生了什麽沒人知道，曆史其實有很多version，而為什麽我們隻學一個version？ -windyLL- ♀   (76 bytes) (7 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:14:24

• 也不一定非要談whose version of history. 通過曆史談眼下和未來也很有意義。這篇文章最後提及， -AutoFill123- ♂   (66 bytes) (13 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:59:51

• This is not an paper, anyway -賈平凸- ♂    (0 bytes) (0 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 18:11:48

• 我覺得得看她的stats才能判斷。單憑文書感覺作者就是那種典型的富人家庭的私校生女孩。 -phoenix05- ♀   (0 bytes) (3 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 12:22:40

• 這種孩子進大學不是靠essay，連stats可能都不太重要，要看家庭背景是否足夠強，能否給她一個強EC。 -windyLL- ♀   (0 bytes) (3 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 12:28:04

• 這種女孩確實有優勢，家庭背景生活方式是藤校喜歡的那種，很fit。也是藤校裏富家子弟wife的人選。 -phoenix05- ♀   (0 bytes) (6 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 12:31:56

• 嗯。這個角度很毒。耶魯拒了 -賈平凸- ♂    (0 bytes) (2 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:10:13

• 耶魯不是跟H就是跟P, 如果耶魯不看好那就玄了 -米湯- ♂    (0 bytes) (1 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 15:11:33

• 是啊，五月花上沒幾個留下來, 這麽wasp太 fit; 不過查一下據說後代有三千萬 -米湯- ♂    (1919 bytes) (45 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 12:32:20

• 如果再玩點field hockey或者lacrosse就100%fit了 ：） -windyLL- ♀   (0 bytes) (3 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 12:38:03

• 樓上幾位，就讓你們說說她能不能錄哈課真難啊 -賈平凸- ♂    (348 bytes) (61 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:05:03

• 我覺得是No，單就文書而言。總體上文筆不錯，後麵的段落有些層次混亂和湊字數的感覺。 -其樂無窮- ♂   (0 bytes) (4 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:15:36

• 我覺得不功不過。 Prompt 是哪個？ -trivial- ♀   (72 bytes) (19 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:24:47

• Interest。這篇就是沒Story隻有Statement -賈平凸- ♂    (0 bytes) (2 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 18:10:41

• Essay 表現了她的未來從政 Passion. H 錄了 -北京姐- ♀   (20 bytes) (21 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:31:09

• 讚！ -賈平凸- ♂    (0 bytes) (0 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 18:08:12

• 我覺得essay一般。寫出了對曆史的興趣，沒寫出leader的潛質。沒錄。 -phoenix05- ♀   (0 bytes) (1 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:34:33

• 參加US Senate Youth Program位於國會大廈的人很少，PAGE 項目人更少 -Cambridge617- ♂   (66 bytes) (66 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:10:18

• 啥是 PAGE, 來紫檀就是長見識，不時冒出來從來沒聽說過的詞 -阿拉拉- ♂   (0 bytes) (2 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:39:43

• 鏈接在這裏 -Cambridge617- ♂   (180 bytes) (37 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 14:45:15

• H沒錄 -amiyumi- ♀   (0 bytes) (6 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 13:46:56

• 錄了。 -jusforfun- ♂   (0 bytes) (5 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 14:16:14

• 讚！ -賈平凸- ♂    (0 bytes) (0 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 18:08:47

• 挺好的。條理清楚，和自己的EC相對應。她其他方麵都有競爭力的話我覺得這Essay過關了。 -randomness- ♀   (0 bytes) (3 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 14:49:42

• 讚！ -賈平凸- ♂    (0 bytes) (0 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 18:09:05

• 過來看謎底：）耶魯沒拒她呀（更正：拒了），劇透還帶虛晃一槍的：D 另外也說明： -安娜阿姨- ♀   (277 bytes) (24 reads) 12/08/2022 postreply 18:36:30

= = = 揭曉謎底= = =

大家猜得結果，50-50吧，可能還不到。喜歡這篇文筆的3/13，喜歡這篇申請文書的4/13

謎底揭曉：

REA--Harvard/ACCEPTED

RD---Duke/accepted; Yale/rejepted; UPenn/WL; Cornell/rejected; Brown/rejected