京劇《穆桂英掛帥》選段
穆桂英由李潔扮演
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猛聽得金鼓響畫角聲震
喚起我破天門壯誌淩雲
想當年桃花馬上威風凜凜
敵血飛濺石榴裙
有生之日責當盡
寸土怎能夠屬於他人
番王小醜何足論
我一劍能擋百萬的兵
Golden drums and painted bugles started pounding.
Break the Fortress to Heaven! My soaring aspiration is waken.
I recall back then I fought majestically on my Peach Blossom.
All over my vermeil skirt, enemy blood spattering.
As long as I am alive, it is an obligation
To keep every inch of our land from intrusion.
The bandit chief and fighters are worthless dummy clowns.
With one sword, I can block attacking soldiers a million.
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*************** 以下為網友們的討論意見及修改過程 ******************
Painted bugles arise(s) while golden drums pounding.
Awakening (is) are my soaring aspirations
To break the trigram named Gate-to-Heaven.
Memories flash of the past:
On my Peach Blossom, gallantly I was fighting.
All over my vermeil skirt, was the enemy blood spattering.
I have to fulfill my liftime obligations(.)
To keep every inch of my land from intruding.
The Fan chief(tian)tain and bandits are worthless to mention.
With one single sword, I can block troops a million.
* * * 解釋如下 * * *
猛聽得金鼓響畫角聲震
Painted bugles arises while golden drums pounding.
self, 關於“金”和“鼓”，下麵是我們家昨晚的討論：
二哥：想起來你早上譯的那句“金鼓響...”，金和鼓應該是兩樣不同的樂器。
二姐：看來是我書讀得太少了。論壇上一早就有人指出這個問題了。
二哥：他們是怎麽說的？
二姐：他們提到“鳴金收兵”，推斷這裏的“金”肯定不是gold. 我當時留意
的是這個“金”是金子還是金人的，因為戲詞都極注重對仗和工整，
後麵用的是“畫角”，所以前麵應為golden drum. 如果這裏是說的“鑼”、
“鼓”和“號”的話，聽起來是有些別扭的。
二小：What are you guys talking about? Explain it in English to me!
二姐：Mom mistook a two word phrase 金鼓 as golden drum, or 金色的鼓。
But it actually should be two musical instruments, one is a piece of metal
shaped like a pot lid, which is for you to hold in one hand and stike with
the other; the other is a drum.
二小：I see. A gong and a drum.
二哥：是啊，要不怎麽能“金鼓齊鳴”呢！
二姐：嗯。。。“金鼓齊鳴”形容戰爭激烈，“鳴金收兵”，“戰鼓催征” 。。。
二哥：這“金”是收兵的時候敲的！這句戲詞寫的有問題。
-- 問題討論清楚了以後，我決定將錯就錯，還是用我原來的翻譯，因為它在聽覺之外，還有一些視覺效應。
喚起我破天門壯誌淩雲
Awakening is my soaring aspirations
To break the trigram named Gate-to-Heaven.
喜歡billnet 的"awakening is ..."句型，又想保留soaring aspiration.
這裏的“天門”，說的是“天門陣”，我前麵用fortess是苦於找不到"陣"這個詞怎麽說。謝謝武都水壩的反饋，覺得這個trigram是最接近原意的一個詞。
破陣，我能想到的合適的動詞，是break和crack，比較之下，覺得break好些。那時候打仗跟現在不一樣，這“破陣”恐怕腦力勞動還較多一些。文青，請替我問問，在這種情況下，storm還合適嗎？
想當年桃花馬上威風凜凜
Memories flash of the past:
On my Peach Blossom, gallantly I was fighting.
Thanks self and 文青 for the word gallantly.
敵血飛濺石榴裙
All over my vermeil skirt, was the enemy blood spattering.
我想留一些動感在裏麵，會不會有些弄巧成拙了？
有生之日責當盡
I have to fulfill my liftime obligations(.)
文青：故事是這樣講的，穆桂英因為朝廷的不公，原想推托，不願掛帥出征的。這裏有思想轉變
的過程。所以這句強調的不是跟敵人戰鬥的決心，而是說給自己聽，勸解自己的。
寸土怎能夠屬於他人
To keep every inch of my land from intruding.
番王小醜何足論
The Fan chieftian and bandits are worthless to mention.
self, 覺得最好時留下這個“番”字，如果是給老外看，就在文後加注釋。
我一劍能擋百萬的兵
With one single sword, I can block troops a million
************之後還有一段關於“番王小醜”的討論**************
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