TRACES OF YOU (圖)

TRACES OF YOU

Knowing                    (u think?!?)

without

(no!) ::::::::::::::::::::::::: seeing

Traces of you

:

VirginSnow

melting

on Teeth = Wordfence

      >>>>>>>           UNspeakably

sweet (i already

told ya that)

Holding

(gimme ur hands, baby)

the weight       of        your laughter

Moon thigh     +        Singing hips

Hot ears

(what heat!)

Rock      Rod       Round        Raw

skin petals         &          many limbs

(roses)         of         (roses)

Alphabets

Belly dance                  on your Tongue

HomeTongue

Hum along

i long visibly

River shyly ~~~~~~~~~~ lingers

(across what song?)

You are thinly aware

Eyes closed

:

Happy tears…………………dried

on my listening lips

*   *   *

Traces of you (dis/re/appearing)

~~~ in my dreams ~~~

are all I have found

. . . 

+

Z

Z

'06

[LTG]

...居然還可以用來感受或藝術或IT或其他等等秒境而契合的秒“諦”也。。。諦"

IT = 諦 [??]

very interesting !!!

:)

[知凡]

correction: 模仿...（"神韻"無人能模仿也無人能將之摧毀....）

IT is always there ... we keep looking .... getting closer ... but no one

can say "I got it".....

！！！！！！

Traces of you (dis/re/appearing)
~~~ in my dreams ~~~
are all I have found
. . .

（你這首詩何其妙也，居然還可以用來感受或藝術或IT或其他等等秒境而契合的秒“諦”也。。。諦。。。仔細看仔細聽，“耳得之而為聲，目遇之而成色”。。。聲色具佳。。。IT is always there ...

[z.z.]

zf: “神韻”無人能模範也無人能將之摧毀....

very original thought ...

IT is always there ... we keep looking .... getting closer ... but no one

can say "I got it".....

水滴,

i like your unplugged singing better :)

enjoy all your posts!!!

cheers!!

[律周]

詩,音,畫.

[by水滴]

Misic background can cover the shortcome of a singer's voice. Qing Chang is like present oneself without cover..:))

I only did it once. See how you guys like it. :)

[知凡]

“i was not really thinking about "美的藝術境界" except trying to capture the moment fleeting my mind's eye.....”

你的創作似乎已入忘“我”之境，就像詩歌裏的

~~~~~~~~~~
(across what song?)
You are thinly aware
Eyes closed
。
。
。
的感覺。。。。。。

我不喜歡judge, 我喜歡感受和疑問。。。但我想反饋說這首詩給我的感受很美，另外有一種說不出的感受更美，我想說那是“~~神~~韻~~”。。。詩成有“~~神~~” “…keep "thoughts" out of the way in my new poems ”...並非容易。。。

每個人都是非常不一樣的，“神韻”無人能模範也無人能將之摧毀。。。我很開心在你的詩歌裏讀到的“~~神~~韻~~”

謝謝分享。。。

[影雲]

i have come to notice that almost all the mediocre arts, lit. & poetry included, are very predictable... that is because, partly, the mediocre artists imitate a lot without transcend the real thing ....

very well said!!!
my favorite topic!!!

mediocre works are not truthful and soulful at all!!! maybe they can sense what beauty is, but they don't seek a "right" way to reach it . . . mostpeople have already stereotyped "beauty" or live in a "formed" external world! even though we talk about the inland of heart, i have to say few reaches!! [i may sound judging:)]

imitation cannot penetrate into the real thing, CORE OF IT, even forms or colors or words look similar, but the difference between art and mediocre is so easily felt!!! - - - Can a person talk exactly like another person? Maybe, can a person dream exactly like another person? I DOUBT!!!

[z.z.]

yy, you touched on a very interesting subject, predictability!!

i have come to notice that almost all the mediocre arts, lit. & poetry included, are very predictable... that is because, partly, the mediocre artists imitate a lot without transcend the real thing ....

they waste time on copying stuff with their pity consciousness wrapped up in a borrowed coat.....

anyway, i can go on and on about it.....

~&~

[影雲]

thoughts usually come from consiousness . . . very retricted though they may sound very intellectual . . . that's why i love "thoughts" from unconsiousness or high-consciousness . . . which flows in its own "unpredictable" way . . .

then,

art is born!!!

[z.z.]

很美的藝術境界是否是下麵的境界？

reader is the judge .... :)

you are the judge!!!

i was not really thinking about "美的藝術境界" except trying to capture the moment fleeting my mind's eye.....


when a poem is done, the poet has no more control in it......

cheers, zf!!

[z.z.]

thanx, y.y.,

that's what i like about the new arts i have found so far.....

i try to keep "thoughts" out of the way in my new poems ....

too self-conscious will make a piece of art too immature, i think ....

~&~

[影雲]

to me, your recent poems are free of "thoughts" . . . very natural and truthful and poetic . . . that's what i love the most and see in watercolor paintings . . .

[z.z.]

the 1st shape of the poem was very different.....

this final shape, i thought, could show how the poem moves downward until we forget the "words"....

haven't noticed the "shape of man and woman" ... :)

[影雲]

beautiful!!!
love it ...
shape of woman & man
in love

:)

[z.z.]

thanx, zf!!!

happy reading!!!

~&~

[知凡]

難以形容的吸引力在字與字，‘福’號與‘福’號之間。。。

難以形容的吸引力縈繞在詩歌裏。。。

你的詩越來越美，越來越美。。。無拘無束的字，‘福’號。。。HARMONY在流淌。。。TRACES OF YOU。。。令人屏息，舒緩，飄渺。。。

Happy tears…………………dried
on my listening lips
...

“此曲隻應天上有”。。。