If the King Got a Present

If the King Got a Present

 

He knows every man

has to work hard

for one's own fate:

the ultimate love

or

the ultimate battle

is hard won

 

The mind also needs

years of knowing

&

making known

in one another

like finding

one's own God

 

Only she can

turn the King into

a little boy again:

making him see

a new picture

of his kingdom again

in one dance

 

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z.z. '05

[LTG]

黃衫,

you are so welcome....!!

hope you'll enjoy the atmosphere here and have fun!!!

goodday!!

[黃衫客]

紅衫，哈哈。。。。。。。。。。。，太有意思了！！SD,have a nice day!

謝謝知凡的歡迎！：）

作舟和影雲，謝謝你們的評論！我本人一直有這樣的恐懼，所以，對英文詩是敬而遠之的。以後，多向你們多學習，希望自己能有所提高吧。：）我沒有完全按原來的詩進行翻譯，所以我說是“an English version”。你們若有時間，請幫我改改，該砍多少就砍多少，很好奇看它最後的樣子。：））

對不起，讓作舟比較迷惑了。請見Joyce的貼在http://www.poetrysky.com/forum.html，很喜歡你們的詩意！：）

再聊，祝你們一天好心情！

[by水滴]

It was 紅衫。：）

[影雲]

黃衫，
我和作舟有同感，感覺非常中文，除了語言本身；我覺得，它本身想表現一種極為
細膩的心情，但非常多的細節可以砍掉。個人意見了：)

[LTG]

黃衫客,

thank you for sharing your poem!!

is this translated from a Chinese poem?

it reads too "Chinese" to me....linguistically, i mean....

i like the content of the poem, but it still needs work....

the "poem" is not quite there yet...

i don't know about your poems or what kind of poems you read, so i don't want to say too much....

maybe you'll share more so that i can too...

cheers!!

z.z.

[知凡]

問候"黃衫客"朋友!!!!!!

歡迎歡迎。。。

常來常來，“狐狸尾巴”翹起來:)

[黃衫客]

Hello,水滴(SD)，nice to meet you here! What's your "old" ID? Like to tell? I'm curious about it. :)

ZZ and YY, :), thank you for your warm welcome. I have some fun already. "Fox' tail" is an interesting description. :)))

Yes, ZZ, YY and I met earlier this year at Poetry Sky. I used a different ID there. As I remember, I met you too. :) .It has been quite a time... I also wrote an English version of my poem later, I have it attached here, like to hear your opinions!!!


Don’t drip, I’m sleeping

Icicles under my eaves are melting
Drops are falling one after another
on the stairs of my front door
The sound of dripping is waking me up
from my sleep, from my dream

oh, my dearest dream
I’m dreaming that I’m back at my hometown
It is night
and the moon is shining in the dark blue sky
The fragrance of the flower on the Chinese Scholar tree
is drifting in the air
and he is standing in the shadow of the tree
with a cigarette lightened

Don’t drip, icicles
Don’t wake me up
I’m sleeping
and I’m dreaming

I had a good dream yesterday
I dreamed about him and several our friends
Candles were lightening
and we were drinking
and talking
and singing
and he was hugging me tightly

The icicles under my eaves are melting
If the drops are my tears
then I’ll stop yelling
Really
I seldom have good dreams like these

If possible,
Mr Winter, don’t leave, please
So you can freeze the icicles up
once again and better,
if possible,
freeze the time also
freeze me like a hibernating insect
So I can keep sleeping
and keep dreaming


:)

[LTG]

YY:

黃衫終於露出了“狐狸尾巴”：)

[Ohhh, you are old friends???]

SD:

"...preoccupied by the vocal art, although most songs are kept to myself.:)"

that is called "self-fishing"....

:))

we all love your singing....you should share more...not just hiding....right?!

[by水滴]

I have been preoccupied by the vocal art, although most songs are kept to myself.:)

[影雲]

黃衫終於露出了“狐狸尾巴”：)
歡迎歡迎：)

[LTG]

welcome, 黃衫客!!!

hope you'll have fun here....

cheers!!!

hi, SD, where have you been??

[by水滴]

Greeting to the new friend (Yellow cloak guest). This ID reminds me my "old" ID. :)

[黃衫客]

影雲、作舟、美魚兒，噢，還有一位知凡朋友，你們好！今天正式“報到”啦！

嘿嘿，我對作舟這首詩的表述方式和所表達的感情還是蠻熟悉的。不過，英文詩的表現，無論是視覺上的還是聽覺上的對我來說都是一個新世界。慢慢向你們學習吧。。。

嗯，也喜歡作舟這首詩，感同美魚兒！：）

[作舟詩集]

輕鬆舒服。。。:)

interesting words to describe it.....

greetings!!

[地中海人魚]

我也喜歡這首。短，讀起來輕鬆舒服。。。

[LTG]

zf, nice job!!!

thanx!!!!!

[知凡]

如果國王得到一個禮物


他知道每個人
都需努力
因為屬於自己的命運：
最初的愛
或
最終的戰鬥
最難贏得

思維也需
經年認知
與
被認知
在一方
像尋覓著
屬於自己的神

隻有她能
將國王再次
變為
一個小男孩
在一舞之中
讓他重新看看
他的王國
一幅新的圖畫

[影雲]

have a great wknd TOO!!!

:))

[作舟詩集]

thank you, YY!!

yeah, this is very veeeeery haaaaaappy poem :))

have a great wknd!!!

[影雲]

非常非常喜歡。。。謝謝分享。。。

最後一段很美，感受到 愛和愛的快樂，“看”到詩中的“畫”。。。