In front of my bed the bright moonlight,
Looks like hoarfrost on the ground white,
Raise my head and gaze at the bright moon afar,
Bow my head and think of my hometown tonight.
改做如下, 如何? 不用miss,是感覺這裏用兩個syllables讀起氣足些。最後兩句同有11個
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