怎麽能寫得像首詩呢，我覺得四不像

老師讓寫一首詩，用到12個劃線的詞，我覺得我寫的根本不是啥詩，是我的詞匯太貧乏還是感覺沒出來，大家能幫我看看嗎？

Spring snow is coming
Slowly but steadily for the overnight
The world turned white with surprise
for this unexpected snow in spring

snowflake knocked my window with quiet drizzling
and left three tears stains through the window
Drifting, drifting, as if rushing for a party
little by little, they unite to a huge cover

In the morning I looked out
Bushes, trees and flowers
All covered with the white sheet
sticks are shaking and flowers are trembling
The world are framed in white mat


everybody is struggling with the snow
Tiptoeing, swirling and almost fell
Like a wolf sneaking to a pig
Somebody is sneezing and sound like
nobody welcome the snow


standing on the snow, I tell myself
the weather is always ruthless and
nothing to be afraid
Many years ago, I came to the world with a
Spring snow but my mother never complained

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• snowtulip，你按照老師的要求把英詩寫出來就已經不錯了。 -婉蕠- ♀ (54 bytes) () 03/15/2010 postreply 10:28:19

• 那倒是，我也就蒙混高中生的水平 -snowtulip- ♀ (92 bytes) () 03/15/2010 postreply 12:58:02

• 斑竹你別給我置頂啊，我這實在太丟了，寫得太臭了 -snowtulip- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/15/2010 postreply 13:00:09