嘻嘻，斧正。。。

it's beyond my capacity to 斧正

I believe in simplicity.

'new and hi-tech' can just be hi-tech
'enlarge and deepens' ->'deepens'

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• 多謝斧正。 還可以大段地修改。段落架構如何？列舉的理由充分嗎？ -我愛瑞士- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/24/2009 postreply 23:31:24

• 謝謝，改得很好。希望就思路、論據也提意見 -我愛瑞士- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/25/2009 postreply 00:42:33