I read once to illustrate what my suggestions are

You might not agree my suggestions, but you are welcome to pick my one apart since I like feedbacks to check how far I have progressed to improve my accent.

I stressed a slight hard on the places i recommended for your consideration.



An exciting trip

I have just received a letter from my brother, Tim. He is in Australia. He has been there for six months. Tim is an engineer. He is working for a big firm and he has already visited a great number of different places in Australia. He has just bought an Australian car and has gone to Alice springs, a small town in the centre of Australia. He will soon visit Darwin. From there, he will fly to Perth. My brother has never been abroad before, so he is finding this trip very exciting.