小戰士急複：“露從今夜白，月是故鄉明 ” 如此翻譯，供參閱！

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"露從今夜白，月是故鄉明" 古句初探，運用“德利三步法”， 思吾友

Sentences:

01：先有白話句：
Look, the morning dew so clean and white, formed through night,
the moon hung high up tonight, reminds me the home moonlight.

02 初稿：
"Stars falling from sky high become the morning dew, brightens tonight D' moonlight home"

03：調整音節音律及韻：成如下句：(就是長了點）

1. "Twilight fall from sky, tonight, morning dew clean n' white, silver shines in home soft moonlight." -First
2. "Twilight fall from sky, tonight, morning dew clean n' white, soft moon home, shines with delight."-Optional
3. "Twilight falls tonight, morning dew white, soft moon home, shines with delight."- Concise


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