回複：漫興閑談 兩地書 致德利君 090605

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本帖於 2009-06-11 05:58:41 時間, 由版主 林貝卡 編輯

one afternoon, not one day afternoon.
out of lake? to where? you meant "out of sight"?
it just give ---- it just gives
sails and moves? one verb is enough.
who wwith delight? boats with delight?
waves scramle water?

這些詩一讀就知道是外行寫的。不合詩道。

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