This piece is really nice! It has light-hearted fun memories

breezy afternoon, azure sky, fish nibbling feet, cicada's chorus, flower garden, and birds' singing paint a vivid picture of peaceful and sensory experience of childhood. 

There is a shift in sentiments in the second stanza. This change gives this piece a sensory depth and adds a philosophical layer to the poem, thanks to Yi Hua :)

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• It's really fun to collaborate on poem or lyrics writing. -甜蟲蟲- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:22:22

• You never know where it is going and how it will end :) -甜蟲蟲- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:22:43

• XiDao's closing verse is brilliant! Thanks for the fun! -甜蟲蟲- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:23:16

• Happy fairy tale ending!:) -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:41:45

• Right. And it goes so smoothly well with the previous verse! -甜蟲蟲- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:46:28

• Couldn't agree with u more！Unexpected Surprise，draw-dropping -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:40:55

• Yeah, definitely. That makes it so interesting :) -甜蟲蟲- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:47:00

• 蟲蟲 is so talented！I admire ur English！ Excellent summary！ -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:38:09

• Thanks for your generous compliment :) However, -甜蟲蟲- ♀ (71 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:50:32

• 不識廬山真麵目，隻緣身在此山中！：） -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:54:52

• haha, thanks! Have a great weekend! -甜蟲蟲- ♀ (144 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:57:56

• In China？把你的評語搬到主貼裏了：） -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 13:03:42

• No, not China.Luckily we don’t need to go so far to see them -甜蟲蟲- ♀ (394 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 16:37:37

• Just like English reading of 7997!:) -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:42:10

• Very nice reading! I listened to his audios before. -甜蟲蟲- ♀ (47 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:55:24

• What I mean is that he read“yin”&“yang” today：） -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:57:27

• I see. I haven't had time to listen to it yet. -甜蟲蟲- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/01/2024 postreply 12:58:37