The sun keeps working (5 syllables)
on a tear for eighteen months (7)
He takes the day off (5)
to propose to his true love(7)
with a golden diamond ring (7)
(Pic from Internet)
Tanka這種形式,
又有數字,又有詩意,很好玩!
歡迎大家接著來玩!
The sun keeps working (5 syllables)
on a tear for eighteen months (7)
He takes the day off (5)
to propose to his true love(7)
with a golden diamond ring (7)
(Pic from Internet)
Tanka這種形式,
又有數字,又有詩意,很好玩!
歡迎大家接著來玩!
• Nice try! This poem needs to be read out to count syllibles. -盈盈一笑間- ♀ (167 bytes) () 04/10/2024 postreply 16:42:26
• It's also very imaginative. -盈盈一笑間- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/10/2024 postreply 16:47:14
• 盈盈是音節專家!:)on a tear是idiom,having great success over a period -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/10/2024 postreply 17:36:13
• of time.也不知道這麽用對嗎? -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/10/2024 postreply 17:36:57
• Very imaginative! With a diamond ring to propose! Love it! -暖冬cool夏- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/10/2024 postreply 19:48:42
• 謝謝暖冬MM鼓勵!我又看了昨天Tanka詩的例子,發現要用複合句,然後那幾個畫麵聯係起來就寫成了:)propose後麵 -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/10/2024 postreply 20:15:58
• 應該有to,我為了湊音節,就把lifelong改成true了:) -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/10/2024 postreply 20:17:01
• 你也來練練吧!我發現寫的過程是真正把知識變成自己的過程,寫出來很開心:) -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/10/2024 postreply 20:19:30
• 寫詩太難了,需要靈感:)先多讀你們的,謝謝妖mm! -暖冬cool夏- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/10/2024 postreply 21:21:29