上AllPoetry首頁的一首詩歌《Who’s the Guide?》

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Who’s the Guide?
by TG


a fish swam from the river into the ocean.
the kaffir lily had a pot and soil changed.
southwest wind blew the pink petals off
fruits grew where blossoms bloomed.
green lotuses in the pond just showed their points
dragonflies sucked the dew drops.
the moment I turned my head
saw a red skirt floating under the plane tree
it was warm as if spring in April.
the train drew a slow arc
entering the station
colorful trolley cases sliding and
dancing on the platform.

I didn’t know which exit to go.
in the evening, full of ears were
す み ま せ ん (I'm so sorry)
and ありがとございます (thank you a lot).
in the morning, the pilot broadcast -
ladies and gentlemen,
may I have your attention please.
we’ll land at the Atlanta Airport in thirty minutes.
please keep your seatbelt fastened until


quicken your steps
to find out the Guide




評分和評論comments:

Autorank Total 10 ( higher is reduced to 10 ), professional similarity 10 (of 10), concrete vs abstract 1 (of 2, too strong -1), noun/verb/etc order 0.9 (of 1)

Likes: kevin, Sand Singer, Sarah Evans, tiramelsu, kaye, Oméga.á.m., Let.it, Samara, Cozyglow, Alice Z, Prathibha.E, Brandon836 To reply, click a comment.

Cozyglow - This is a great piece, very deserving of the front page pick! Congratulations! Love the scenes you described here and your word choices. Every transition is flowing elegantly. Perhaps the nature's law is at work, the Guide? a month ago x rate: , , skip


Alice Z - So many turning points in one beautiful poem, and who is the guide? Good question. A very meaningful and beautiful read. Love it! Congratulations on this FPP a month ago x rate: , , skip

Alice Z - Who's the Guide? Good question. I think it's fate, something that we cannot control by ourselves. Thank you for sharing this amazing piece.

Inspired a month ago x


Sarah Evans - ← A scene well captured here. Travelling between countries with different perspectives. Congratulations on your front page pick.

Inspired! a month ago x rate: , , skip


Oméga.á.m. - ← Very tactical and transcendental cadence poetry skills a month ago x rate: , , skip


Let.it - Its lovely!!!

Keep on it a month ago x


Prathibha.E - so good! wish I could travel here..... a month ago x




中文版本

《轉折點》


魚隨河流入海
君子蘭換了盆和土
風來把粉色花瓣吹落,
開花的地方長出青的果實
池塘裏綠荷露出角,尖尖的,
蜻蜓吮吸著上麵的清露
回頭的瞬,梧桐樹下飄來一條紅裙子,
空氣和煦得如四月的春
進站之前,火車劃了一個緩慢的弧
月台上五顏六色的拉杆箱滑動著舞步,
不知要去哪個方向
傍晚的耳邊是すみません(真是對不起您了)
ありがとございます(實在是感激不盡)
清晨聽見ladies and gentlemen, may I
have your attention please.
may I have your attention please.
in thirty minutes we’ll land at
the hartsfield-jackson atlanta international airport.
please keep your seatbelt fastened until …

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友友們一周快樂:) -忒忒綠- 給 忒忒綠 發送悄悄話 忒忒綠 的博客首頁 忒忒綠 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 08:41:00

great achievement -移花接木- 給 移花接木 發送悄悄話 移花接木 的博客首頁 移花接木 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 09:44:06

花帥尿尿,good morning:) -忒忒綠- 給 忒忒綠 發送悄悄話 忒忒綠 的博客首頁 忒忒綠 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 09:49:00

哈哈,我是臭顯擺:) -忒忒綠- 給 忒忒綠 發送悄悄話 忒忒綠 的博客首頁 忒忒綠 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 19:59:00

美壇出去的,當然是All poetry的首頁水平:) -妖妖靈- 給 妖妖靈 發送悄悄話 妖妖靈 的博客首頁 妖妖靈 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 19:47:55

美鳳好,真會說話:) -忒忒綠- 給 忒忒綠 發送悄悄話 忒忒綠 的博客首頁 忒忒綠 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 19:58:00

我是幸運而已:) -忒忒綠- 給 忒忒綠 發送悄悄話 忒忒綠 的博客首頁 忒忒綠 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 20:15:00

水平在那擺著。連這點自信還沒有:) -妖妖靈- 給 妖妖靈 發送悄悄話 妖妖靈 的博客首頁 妖妖靈 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 20:50:31

恭喜忒綠。首頁進來,謝謝網管,上AllPoetry首頁的一首詩歌《Who’s the Guide?》推薦成功 -梅雨潭- 給 梅雨潭 發送悄悄話 梅雨潭 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 19:54:46

謝謝網管和妖妖! -忒忒綠- 給 忒忒綠 發送悄悄話 忒忒綠 的博客首頁 忒忒綠 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 20:01:00

網管是不是對美壇開後門了 hahaha:)) -忒忒綠- 給 忒忒綠 發送悄悄話 忒忒綠 的博客首頁 忒忒綠 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 20:02:00

溫故而知新,再讀再讚,謝謝詩人忒綠分享佳作。 -CBA7- 給 CBA7 發送悄悄話 CBA7 的博客首頁 CBA7 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 21:05:59

Who's the Guide? I think it's fate too. Great piece! -盈盈一笑間- 給 盈盈一笑間 發送悄悄話 盈盈一笑間 的博客首頁 盈盈一笑間 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/05/2022 postreply 05:11:41

這篇還挺耐讀的。恭喜綠兄。這是顫音常去的那個英文詩網站嗎? -盈盈一笑間- 給 盈盈一笑間 發送悄悄話 盈盈一笑間 的博客首頁 盈盈一笑間 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/05/2022 postreply 05:13:11

謝謝各位來讀:) -忒忒綠- 給 忒忒綠 發送悄悄話 忒忒綠 的博客首頁 忒忒綠 的個人群組 (0 bytes) () 10/07/2022 postreply 21:35:00

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