on ashes

Frozen ashes

Frozen ashes
from whose bones
left alone
for ages
in the ark
in the dark
But the ashes glow
as white as snow

© a day ago, destiny   
 
Likes: Amlu 

Amlu - Powerful brevity with strong imagery. well penned

Great

a day ago 

Freedom

Bones anchored to tendons
Tendons anchored to muscles
Where is bones' freedom

Ask wind
in which freedom flows
Ask fire
in which freedom burns

Hugs between tendons and muscles
Dances between wind and fire
Bones into ashes
fly and paint the sky gray

© a day ago, 

Amlu - A powerful ink on freedom..so creative with strong imagery. How true! bones are not feer at all..Great write making the readers ponder on it.

Liked it

 

Paidge Searchwell - A deep poem bringing on analytical questions. Great work!

a day ago 

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• 早晨看到一起車禍，心有餘悸～ -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/21/2022 postreply 18:23:02

• sorry -顫音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/23/2022 postreply 08:13:43

• 欣賞！覺得最後一句有點弱，也許是我沒讀懂 ～～ -天玉之- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/21/2022 postreply 19:47:36

• 您說的對，我也沒懂我想寫啥，就是憑直覺碼字 哈哈哈 -顫音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/23/2022 postreply 08:13:28

• As white as snow... -kirn- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/22/2022 postreply 07:58:25

• creepy？ghostly？ -顫音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/23/2022 postreply 08:14:10

• "though your sins be as scarlet, they shall be......" -kirn- ♀ (147 bytes) () 06/23/2022 postreply 14:30:11

• 恭喜顫音。首頁進來，謝謝網管，on ashes 推薦成功 -梅雨潭- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/23/2022 postreply 17:42:44

• 很棒。讚。 -chuntianle- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/27/2022 postreply 08:29:05