Lost in translation?

Lost in translation? Not always true, occasionally the opposite happens.

有一陣我很喜歡餘秀華的詩， 就試著翻譯了一些。有一首

《阿樂，你又不幸的被我想起》 

 

餘秀華

 

我不敢把我的心給你 

怕我一想你，你就疼 

我不能把我的眼給你 

怕我一哭，你就流淚 

我無法把我的命給你 

因為我一死去，你也會消逝 

 

我要了你身後的位置 

當我看你時，你看不見我 

我要了你夜晚的影子 

當我叫你時，你就聽不見 

我要下了你的暮年 

從現在開始釀酒

 

我翻譯時，阿樂就音譯，Ale , 可以啤酒一種在英文裏也是 ale ，歧義就由翻譯產生了，證據是一位德國網友的留言。當把 Ale 當作啤酒，而非情郎時，發現整首詩真是傾訴對啤酒的愛，哈哈哈。

Ale, unfortunately you are missed by me

I don't dare to give you my heart.
I'm afraid if I miss you, you feel pain.
I can't give you my eyes.
I'm afraid if I cry, tears roll out of your eyes.
I can't give you my life,
for if I die, you will vanish, too.

I own the position behind you.
When I gaze at you, you don't see me.
I own your shadow at night.
When I call you, you don't hear me.
I own your declining years.
I start making wine now.

originally written in Chinese by Xiuhua Yu

translation © 3 years ago, rhyme • love   
 

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Klangflocke - To me it´s a clear written wonderful poem! Greetings from germany Klaus

所有跟帖： 

• 現在不喜歡了？她有些還真的不錯，不是所有的 -kirn- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/12/2022 postreply 20:37:39

• 曾經看過這首。她的成功很不容易 -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/12/2022 postreply 22:25:38

• +10086！！！ -盈盈一笑間- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/14/2022 postreply 17:49:09

• 點讚。很棒。欣賞了。也謝謝你的支持 -chuntianle- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/13/2022 postreply 00:13:14

• 文學城出問題，不一一回複，謝謝所有讀和留言的 -顫音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/13/2022 postreply 13:25:51

• 恭喜顫音。首頁進來，謝謝網管，Lost in translation? 推薦成功 -梅雨潭- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/13/2022 postreply 17:24:32

• 謝謝！ -顫音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/14/2022 postreply 09:41:23