【少年錦時】 Once upon a time 舊的 挖出來參加活動

Once upon a time

Once upon a time,
I stepped on half a dime.
For the other half, I searched the playground,
but wished for a pound.
I stumbled and so flied the half dime,
in a curve ended in a lily pound.
I heard giggles as resonating as chime,
before I turned my body around.
It is the girl from my neighbor,
in her hands a snow-white lily flower.
She shrouded me with a smell of thyme,
and left on my bruised lips a taste of lime.

© 5 years ago   

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Z - Good fun

4 years ago  

George Hamilton - A

This is a poem just for a poem and well constructed, alive and happy.

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• 哈哈，場景很好玩，還巧妙地用了“ in for a penny, in for a pound ” -妖妖靈- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/03/2022 postreply 16:24:16

• 瞎玩，謝謝 -顫音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/04/2022 postreply 09:41:52

• 寫得好！讀顫音的詩，我會忍不住盯著韻腳看。這首是 aabb,abab的寫法？：） -盈盈一笑間- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/03/2022 postreply 22:26:01

• 俺都沒刻意，就是一邊寫，一邊默讀，怎麽順溜怎麽來，覺得14行詩那種還是太rigid -顫音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/04/2022 postreply 09:43:23

• 厲害！詩壇有一個常年寫14行詩的，可以去探討一下。。 -盈盈一笑間- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/05/2022 postreply 10:08:34

• 恭喜顫音。首頁進來，謝謝網管，【少年錦時】 Once upon a time 舊的 挖出來參加活動 推薦成功 -梅雨潭- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/05/2022 postreply 17:47:46

• 謝謝 -顫音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/06/2022 postreply 16:57:35