Dust Is it a haiku? Didn't intend to write a haiku

Dust

A stirring of dust
Dancing in the air
Tells me in light we trust
© 8 days ago

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Likes: O Amante, Jenny Middleton, Moss M. Jacques

Jenny Middleton - I like how visual your haiku is XX and there is a lovely sense of positivity about the ending.2 days ago 

 

O Amante - Simple, short and yet it packs so much elegance and details. I could see the dust dancing in the air.

Amazing!

 

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• 詩人眼裏，空氣中的微塵就是光的詩，想起花董的“Light”：） -beautifulwind- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2021 postreply 22:02:26

• 前兩句挺好的，第三句有點說教的感覺。我讀過不少日本的Haiku, 就知道有三句，也不知有什麽規矩。我自己寫了不少幾句短詩，有機會 -天玉之- ♀ (41 bytes) () 07/19/2021 postreply 09:15:59

• 第一次知道有這樣一種詩體，好玩！看來 -天山晨- ♂ (177 bytes) () 07/19/2021 postreply 17:52:29