詩人寫詩,是寫心中之妙,或簡單說,是一種感覺,是在心間的流動,所以是很自然的,但有時不知道原因。
我剛才恍然大悟,最後一句的主語,就是“Often sitting in the attic with dove”。整個動名詞結構做主語,是爸爸坐在閣樓上吹笛子,還有象征愛情的鴿子,整個做主語。而“the melody”,我從一開始就是當做“love”的比喻。你可以說“Flew his love/the love melody into her heart”,但一定要說那麽清楚麽?
Often sitting in the attic with dove
Flew the melody into her heart
這就對了。:-)