My Chinese isn't good enough for me to comment on the translatio

來源: justlook 於 2014-07-02 05:33:23 [] [舊帖] [給我悄悄話] 閱讀數 : (399 bytes)

even the spring upon the ancient skies
would never walk that mile.

i guess I know what the author wanted to say, but to me these lines are confusing

Rhyme: the author started out strong: smile - mile, past - last. Then too strong: away - away. Suddenly no more rhyme. Looks like the author couldn't finish what he or she started:)

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